Haiku: New

inside this acorn
old, cracked, dormant under snow
something stirs that’s new

***for Audra and the Panda, as well as HH!

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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61 Responses to Haiku: New

  1. ruleofstupid says:

    Go away and stop being better than me… smell bag!! 😉

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  3. nelle says:

    And at some indeterminate date ahead, might loom large in memories from someone’s childhood.

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  6. I loved this Susan!

  7. mobius faith says:

    Wonderfully evocative haiku Susan. Well done.

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  9. janehewey says:

    mmm inside this acorn – a powerful line… old and cracked promising something new. wonderful.

  10. Can I try? – I haven’t done one before – in fact still reading up on what a Haiku should be! 5 word line then 7 then 5?

  11. Here goes – PLEASE critique?

    Giant peaks acorn found
    Cracked, exposed, barren
    Gelid times,stiff solid

    • Hmmm. Interesting take. You have made it small, and I like the rhythm of it. But, try this. Try to think about walking up the peak, how does it feel? Now write that in 5 syllables or less. Now, describe encountering the acorn, perhaps wedged between rocks on the slope, and try to tell us that in 7 syllables. And bring it all home, suggesting the gelid times. Like the core of this. So…something like

      climbing the mountain
      an acorn, cracked, exposed raw
      no place for growth here

      go for the visual, and just a bit of telling.

  12. Forged and weary mountain climb
    Acorn death lain open bare
    Empty shell broken rests in gelid tarns

    Ok I’ve lost the plot completely!
    This is so difficult – and I thought it would be simple! 😉

  13. Ok popping over and giving it a whirl! Heaven help the readers!

  14. dulcinaandgnome says:

    New silent life hidden everywhere, surrounding us, under our feet, inside tiny things…, can we feel it? Lovely, Susan.
    Happy New Year!
    🙂

  15. Susan i thought I had commented yesterday when I came here. The net was so slow that I fell asleep behind the laptop 🙂 This haiku gives me the idea of something slowly stirring to life adn then suddenly, bam! it is there, a new creation. Wonderfully written, as always. Wonderful new year to you, Susan 🙂

  16. Reshma says:

    The haiku brought out the essence of life nicely, there is always something new round the corner:)

  17. Meenakshi says:

    beautiful haiku depicting possibilities of life…very well crafted!

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