WOW. I was going to change mine, but Stephen Kellogg wrote this, so I won’t. GORGEOUS.
This is a response poem inspired by the poem “if this were a love poem” written by Susan L Daniels and found on her wonderful blog here.
If this were a response to your love poem
I might say once I cried a thousand tears
you saw them as stars
they really were fears
of all that was blooming
if this were a response to your love poem
which it isn’t
so I won’t
I could mention you called my name
held it as a banner
a sweet refrain
as I listened in shame
if this were a response to your love poem
which it isn’t
so I won’t
I could tell how the sound of you
sparked hope and fear
as I sat silenced here
your voice fading away
if this were a response to your love poem
which it isn’t
so I won’t
this can’t be a…
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Susan Daniels Poetry 
Susan,
Thanks for the comments, inspiration and reblog. It merely reflects the beauty in your original poem.
Peace,
Stephen
Oh, I must disagree. The reflection/response has its own beauty and deserves to be shared. Thanks so much for writing it.
Excellent.
Isn’t it just? I LOVE poetic responses.
I should try if I was in the same league as you guys, RoS liked my last one & said I should do more along those lines… strange obviously the macabre got a reaction!
Keep up the excellence Susan 🙂
Aw, shucks–thanks. Leagues? Nah, we are all people sharing our words. If we are in leagues, I am still playing “midget football poetry.”
I beg to differ young lady 🙂
Hahaha–you are very kind to say so, ma’am. I feel like I am still stretching to reach a certain point of growth–no idea where it is yet, though.
I have finally learnt through reading you and others that there is far more to writing prose/poetry than what I ever imagined. I see comments about stanzas and meanings and mixing – all of which I never had to assess before. I spew forth words that come into my head. Most of the time my vocab is stilted or nor as elaborate, but hopefully I am getting there. So thank you for opening my eyes a little more and my mind to see other options/styles. As long as I continue to grow or folks that read are moved and can experience some emotion – that is what will continue to please me – this is all ‘us’ writers can ever hope to accomplish.
I spew forth words that come into my head. God, woman, I love that Use it or I shall shamelessly steal from your comment 😉
I love your spewing, so keep it up.
Taking it and running 😉 Thanks Sus’
COOL–have fun with it!
so… is that a new writing prompt???
“I spew forth word that come into my head”
Let me know 😀
Stephen
LOL, I think Rambles will kick my butt if I use it 😉
oh please Susan… you would be in the pro’s for sure woman. I would be in the bleachers eating some hot dogs cheering you on…
Oh, you Still have a lot to learn, but thank you! Can you get me a dog with onions, dill relish, kraut & mustard, please (sorry, sounds gross, I know, but I like ’em sour…)
sounds good with out the kraut.. Rochester Red Wing game next summer?
YES! You are ON….
Possibly 🙂 right fingers at the ready, brain into 1st gear… away I go 🙂
Can’t wait to see what you come up with
Awesome
Thanks, Celestine–I cannot believe how quickly he crafted his response. I really, really loved it.
done 🙂
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