patience (2)

Patience is a virgin, she said
and that’s how she heard it
and never called it virtue,
her metaphorical hymen
keeping her dress down
and bracketed by thighs so tight
she almost forgets what she’s waiting for
and why that aspirin is between her knees.

You can’t run or swim or play tennis
with a pill sandwiched by your legs
for so long only the press
of that circle marking your skin
has importance, and so much is lost
in that long wait.

***at dVerse today, we are turning phrases on their heads.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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54 Responses to patience (2)

  1. Blew me away! O, my goodness. Aspirin between her knees!

    • Noel, No lie, she was not the brightest girl in the world (best friend in high school), but she was the most tenacious young woman I ever met. She might have heard the phrase wrong, but she was sticking to what she said, no matter what. Makes me smile, still, all these years later.

  2. hahahahaha – haven’t heard the aspirin phrase since I was in Catholic gradeschool

  3. annotating60 says:

    So good to see you back and in wonderful form. Great read Susan. >KB

  4. brilliant –> “and that’s how she heard it
    and never called it virtue,
    her metaphorical hymen
    keeping her dress down”

  5. Alice Keys says:

    Great twisted phrase. The aspirin between the knees saying only make me think of ways WITH the aspirin there. 😉

  6. I can’t believe that is from real life (Patience is virgin). Quite an interesting and distinctive pair of patience poems, I loved both of them.

  7. She was odd, she was quirky- but you show her respect. You give a rounded view. Also I like the sheer eccenticity of it all.

  8. claudia says:

    patience is a virgin – made me smile.. and in a way fun that she stuck to it all these years – some things hinder more than help sometimes.. maybe we see it only in the rearview how it is or could have been.. she sounds interesting for sure…smiles

  9. This was a lot of fun.. and have never heard about the aspiring between the knees… lot’s of fun.

  10. shanyns says:

    I know some people who are literal about things like that, even holding on to them when they get it wrong. What a super write for the prompt. Thanks tons for joining in. I’m still smiling!

  11. welshstream says:

    Oh that is a really cool, fun poem ….made smile a lot and ‘she almost forgets what she’s waiting for’ for me is the pivot on which the whole thing swings

  12. brian miller says:

    ha. that could ba a whole other prompt…the things we heard wrong and yet still believed…yes, you miss out on quite a bit of life with that asprin between your knees but there would def be some benefit to bit higher moral standard in our world…there has to be a balance there somewhere…

  13. Trent Lewin says:

    Now that’s a sack full of images I’d sling over my shoulder and walk down the road. Sweet stuff SD. Covers a heck of a lot in a few words. I really don’t see the word hymen in enough poetry.

  14. Grace says:

    I don’t mind waiting as long as I know the end and purpose of it ~ Aspirin between her legs, that imagery made me pause for a bit ~ she must have been quite a character ~

  15. Made me laugh, it’s funny what we cling to, even if it’s incorrect.

  16. I honestly felt I was on a high-wire ! You’re outstanding !

  17. hypercryptical says:

    Wonderful write Susan – made me smile.
    I can remember the aspirin…not that i was naive enough to believe it…but I was naive!
    Anna :o]

  18. nelle says:

    Ooh, so playful and biting. Love it.

  19. Lindy Lee says:

    Whatever happened to this Aspirin Girl?

  20. Mary says:

    I think it would be a real trick to hold an aspirin between the knees!! Undoubtedly a task the priest devised. Smiles.

  21. That’s what she heard. A young girl told me that the preacher said we are all heirs of God…but in her mind she spelled it hairs. She told me she thought the preacher was really weird. Ha.

    Your poem is great. This I find amazingly good.
    Patience is a virgin, she said
    and that’s how she heard it
    and never called it virtue,
    her metaphorical hymen
    keeping her dress down

  22. Excellent! I had a relative who used to hear phrases incorrectly, bless her. This reminds me of her 🙂

  23. LaTonya says:

    What an unexpected direction which now that you’ve done it, makes perfect sense. And the emphasis on virtue without comphrension and value to the individual, spot on. Took me back to all those talks about getting pregnant instead of talking about loving and valuing myself.

  24. Thanks for making me smile, had to giggle. Never heard of the asprin thing maybe its because I’m a brit.

  25. She could be ‘right’ you know, when viewed against your first Patience poem. The waiting, as only a virgin could. A brilliant metaphor, Susan with tongue-in-cheek humour as only you know how! 🙂

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