Love Letter: Response Poem

If I were a ladybug
I would marry you
in your constant opening to air;
my 12 footprints
tracking pollen across our moss bed,
these antenna two quills
shaped simply
to scribe your sweet
with nectar ink.

I would love you
across kingdoms
and shout a vow too large
for one small voice;

A promise of passion
that can only be collective
and rooted, the way seeds
and hemolymph speak it.

I will lay eggs
under your leaves
and our children
will speak of this promise
blooming.

***I do not write response poems, but tonight I had to.  Thanks to Eulonia for triggering this, and Leo for the first line of this poem (in the comments).

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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30 Responses to Love Letter: Response Poem

  1. Leo says:

    This is lovely,Susan. Don’t you love the gifts that Eulonia leaves us; too infrequently, I might add. They are unique and precious. Leo

    • Thanks, Leo, and also thank you for your comment on her site–I had to write this after I read it! Sigh. Her work is so wildly beautiful. The fact that she shares some with us is wonderful…I would want to read her daily, if I could.

  2. annotating60 says:

    Susan, really a wonderful poem. Great Read.>KB

  3. Trent Lewin says:

    This might sound a bit off, but this kind of feels like Revenge of the Grouchy Ladybug. I would imagine a good swat by a whale’s tail can engender lust even in insects, a theory that I would love to test.

  4. Alice Keys says:

    What a sweet, inspired love poem. It make me want to fly away home.

  5. brandyeli says:

    This is a beautifully written poem. I enjoyed the imagery and love writing that incorporates the smallest things, recognizing how important the life of a bug is. I felt like sharing it with my lover right away. Very romantic. Thank you.

  6. Would I be off if my impression was sentimental ? You resonated with Lydia Davies~ I’m certain you know her. BEAUTIFUL Susan !

  7. eulonia says:

    i love you. now we have eggs.

  8. The perfect love poem to a great start of a Monday.

    This poetic feel says it all with a punch to the moon. 🙂

  9. janehewey says:

    sweet, sticky ladybug love… building to a marvelous final stanza.

  10. Every line, so spectacular!! I love the twelve footprints.

  11. awesome response poem, Susan!

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