letter to an old lover

I don’t remember the color of the walls
in the room where we first spoke,
but I do know the color of the glove
I left in your car so I would see you again–
dangerously red and obvious,

dark as a lipsticked kiss
staining a white shirt collar, evidence of sin.

 

***We are writing letters at dVerse today.

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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65 Responses to letter to an old lover

  1. brian miller says:

    oo la la….obvious as the red lipstick on the white shirt…evidence of sin…this is hot…ha.
    very nice.

  2. kingmidget says:

    I don’t come here often enough these days. Love your work.

  3. Mary says:

    Whew, this packs a poetic punch, Susan!! Of course it would be a RED glove as well. Funny how certain things are accidentally left behind at times…………..

  4. What an image, dangerously red & obvious ~ An evidence of sin for sure ~ Good one Susan ~

  5. howanxious says:

    ha… what a fun read.. the color of seduction and love… am still smiling, and blushing a bit as well. πŸ™‚

  6. Gabriella says:

    Wicked little scheme! But it seems to have worked.

  7. Ha ha…love this. Very clever on both poem and plot! πŸ™‚

  8. Laurie Kolp says:

    I really like this, Susan!

  9. Rowan Taw says:

    A cheeky move with that red glove! Great poem 😊

  10. claudia says:

    uuuuhhhhh…this is dangerous good write…smiles

  11. Miriam E. says:

    oh, wicked cool. love the ‘red sins’ displayed here… hope you got your glove back – and some… heh.

  12. kaykuala says:

    Saying it like it is. Secrets of the young lass can be interesting to see. Often times the boy had wished he would find the glove. It made things a lot easier! Great write Susan!

    Hank

  13. such a sexy little note – love the red glove and lipstick – smile – K

  14. Of course the glove would be red……….I can see it! Love the closing lines especially.

  15. Rhonda says:

    Small note, speaking red hot volumes!!

  16. Ah leaving a glove on purpose… that’s a great story… and I can also read some sadness that it’s over….

  17. nelle says:

    There’s an understated sassiness, determined, hopeful. LIke.

  18. Alice Keys says:

    I love when you give a surgically clean slice of life in such a few words like this.

  19. Love it. You always manage to say so much in so few words – that’s a talent. You often remind me of Lydia Davis in that way.

  20. Oh my this is amazing writing Susan. Your writing is always a delight – but this one is sparkling in all the right places!

  21. Who needs walls when you have a red glove? Love the laser-focused detail.

  22. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    Oh, it sends delicious shivers up my spine.

  23. Susan, LOVE the imagery of the “dangerously” red glove left behind… wickedly fun. A small poem of a heart aching for what’s next. This was a wonderful read. Amy

  24. unfetteredbs says:

    Kerpow.. So strong woman. Loved the dark sinful sultriness

  25. dangerous games. a powerful punch

  26. wow, Susan, wow. Those first moments! How we recall and relive details from them! Great poem! The second stanza swims in mischief and steals the innocence of the first! πŸ˜‰

  27. shanyns says:

    Awesome! πŸ˜€

  28. George Ellington says:

    Beautifully composed, Susan. Memorable. Physically memorable.

  29. That’s funny, I remember leaving something of the same hue between the sheets of Boyfriend’s bed when I flew back home the first time πŸ˜€

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