what it isn’t

Before you envision an us,
before you stroke emotions further
in a masturbation without release, a frictioned
fictioned state of caging behind
bars you gilt edge and name unrequited,

I should tell you
loves-me/loves-me-not outcomes
are fixed before beginning:
petals plucked honestly come out even and always
on the not side of the slash.  The heart
flips like a trick coin and we call it midair
when the outcome is statistically predetermined

falling.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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35 Responses to what it isn’t

  1. Oh wow this reads with quite a punch Susan. Fantastic

    • Gretchen, thank you! It’s been simmering a while. Watched something about unrequited love a few weeks ago, and after that, this started bubbling.

  2. Stunning! I especially like the phrase ‘frictioned / fictioned state of caging’ great alliteration / assonance / consonance ~ drips from the lips 🙂

  3. unfetteredbs says:

    Frictioned fictioned state.– perfect. This is superb.

  4. This is strong! Victims of unrequited love are first and foremost victims of their own imaginations and flawed cravings? The words are all beautiful, though in a sad way, but these lines

    you stroke emotions further
    in a masturbation without release, a frictioned
    fictioned state

    na killi-me-die dem be!
    When I become a poet, I hope to be able to sing with word like you do!

  5. piaspurpose says:

    “loves-me/loves-me-not outcomes” – black and white. brutally true. good job!

  6. Love this susan–in so many ways. Honest, hard, real. How deterministic life can be when we are caught in loops…

  7. George Ellington says:

    My goodness, Susan, I do very much enjoy reading such a cold splash of reality in the morning. No, not splash. What’s the word I was looking for? Oh yes–slap!

    • .Oh, I hope it did not hit too hard, George (this from one incurable romantic to another!).

      • George Ellington says:

        Oh, not too hard at all, Susan. I know, I’m a wee sook at times, but I held up well enough. It was one of those times, reading “what it isn’t,” when I felt an anger, a hurt in your words, but at the same time, thanks to your (as always) wonderfully creative choice of words, I couldn’t help but smile while reading them. I must be in a right mood this morning. 😉

  8. potterfan97 says:

    Each of your words is a slam of brilliance against my unprepared mind 🙂 Wow and WOW!

  9. trick cain, midair ~ awesome !

  10. Jeremy Nathan Marks says:

    This is an interesting poem, Susan. Especially because I see a contrast here between a circle of feelings and a linear, masturbatory and self-serving linear view of love.

    In other words, the linear way says: I want this from you and so the coin is called in the air.

    The circular way says: I will love you in my own time and in my own seasons.

  11. yeoldefoole says:

    as always, you inspire me!

  12. So much of this, I needed. Craved it like oasis, I am settled down into these words now, bathing in them. Oh, they comfort my wounds, to know how you know them.

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