I  wrote you a poem once
about salmon fighting currents,
tire sandals, and Kenyan dust

it was less about you
and more about that pacing wild
you owned

the thing I never understood

I wrote it
after you left me without words
for once

on my front steps

I had an answer for you
I didn’t say.  but

it was less about want
and more
about timing

which was
as always with us


About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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47 Responses to timing

  1. Rhonda says:

    love the tag. 🙂

  2. …memory surfaces…

  3. dulzimordash says:

    Reblogged this on Spontaneous Creativity.

  4. brian miller says:

    timing def is important…interesting…i think the wildness you saw in them as alluring def can be…as it breaks through our normalcy at times…and can be refreshing…though again it always comes back to timing…

  5. Love this Susan… and the little wordplay at the very end…

    off – Love it

  6. Love this–everything about it works for me–

  7. jeglatter says:

    hmmmm….really good poetry comes from “bad” timing.:)

  8. The opening hooked me- what a great start. And the ending- pitch perfect.

  9. Rhonda L. Brockmeyer says:

    Timing…Is Everything…and I loved the quirky tilt to this, adding the perfect off-time.

  10. Mary says:

    “It was less about want and more about timing.” I definitely understand that! I like the style you used to write this poem. Very effective.

  11. nelle says:

    Off. Like.

  12. Funny how in some relationships the timing always seems to be off ~ cool write, Susan.

  13. aka_andrea says:

    I like how so much that wasn’t still did not eclipse how much was.

  14. ayala says:

    A beautiful poem!

  15. Missed timing has been the story of my life, Very nicely put.

  16. claudia says:

    this builds beautifully..unwraps in the going…it was less about want
    and more
    about timing….great…

  17. timing and relationships!….the last word …off! in so few words an insight into this pairing of opposites..great…thankyou

  18. “…more about that pacing wild you owned” Fabulous line!

  19. Yousei Hime says:

    How I understand the offness in relationships. I really like that use of refrain and shifting from what is not to what is. Very nice piece.

  20. I really love this. The not understanding. The being left on the front porch. Wistful and lovely.

  21. Tony Maude says:

    Timing … or the lack of it … lies at the heart of so much, from the witty riposte to being in the right place at the right time to meet the right person.

  22. kelly says:

    Oh, this is so good… Yes, I know that place, timing really is everything. I love the way you broke the lines, really added to the rhythm.

  23. “I wrote it
    after you left me without words
    for once”

    That’s my favorite line… I always feel empty when left without words. Nicely done.

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