Completing the set

for Jeff

You were bigger than my doll
but quiet.  When I bounced her on my lap
she squawked mama through her plastic mouth,
but you had no words, only bubbles;
black licorice eyes
shinier than jellybeans in an Easter basket.

Your fingers knew how to catch mine already
and not let go.  Babies are better than dolls
because they see you, I said

and went back to my crayons.

Happy birthday, baby bro.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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54 Responses to Completing the set

  1. This is such a lovely birthday wish and memory – nicely delivered 🙂

  2. brian miller says:

    smiles…i love the love of the baby brother….that makes me smile…because they see you really jumped out at me in this…and caught me a bit…interesting piece susan

  3. Alice Keys says:

    What a delightful gift. Very nice.

  4. wolfsrosebud says:

    truly saw those dark eyes… so much better than doll… to bad they cry

  5. claudia says:

    made me smile… when our little one was born, tim was two and not at all interested in her.. only when she was old enough for some adventures…smiles

  6. Susan says:

    O, I love the candy that babies are made of! I bet Jeff enjoys this too. I liked the tone of contentment, the fact that he was better than a doll and the equality of the crayons.

  7. Shah Wharton says:

    Oh I love this. I lost my older brother 2004, but there’s a picture of me cradled in his 4 year old arms, smiling. This poem put me in mind of what he must have thought of the chubby living doll in his lap. Thank you Susan. X

  8. Aw … that’s nice 🙂

  9. lucychili says:

    babies are remarkable hey, even for folks who are quite small =)

  10. nico says:

    Black licorice eyes, the tiny grasping hands–wonderful details in this. Such a nice little baby, and you left him for some crayons! That’s the way it is, though. Very well done.

  11. Mary says:

    Indeed baby brothers are better than dolls!! What a wonderful birthday wish for him as well.

  12. Mary says:

    You can delete this comment; but I must say I had thought that AD that appeared with your poem was a video that had something to do with your brother…..sigh…and eventually after waiting for the ad to end I realized that the whole thing WAS an ad for Samsung. I wonder why Word Press is putting these ads on blogs now….or if there is a way a person can get rid of them. Quite annoying.

  13. mobius faith says:

    What a cool birthday gift. “little bro” must be proud.

  14. Lori Lipsky says:

    Wonderful, Susan. You’ve inspired me. I need to write something for my brother.

  15. Such a special birthday, wish, Susan. I love the licorice eyes and just happen to have a big tub of Jelly Belly’s near by. :0) Hope you sent this to him!

  16. BroadBlogs says:

    What a great birthday present!

  17. This is so sweet…”you had no words, only bubbles” I love that.

  18. Dana says:

    This brought a smile to my face. I loved reading this. 🙂

  19. hypercryptical says:

    Lovely.

    Anna :o]

  20. Big sisters will always be sisters! This is so thoughtful and could only come from a poet with a wonderful memory and an overflow of warmth.

  21. Great contrast for such a young mind to make, between the living and a plaything. A wonderful memory to share with your brother.

  22. nelle says:

    Nice birthday wish for your brother. 🙂

  23. What a lovely birthday piece. 🙂

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