the other side of sleep

Most of what we seek is hidden
truth that flees, but comes unbidden
summoned through magic, coiled and deep–
that waits the other side of sleep

the pain we carry is phantom,
echoed in remembered rhythm
embedded in these nerves that weave
what waits the other side of sleep

the threads we twine with quiet looms
to fabricΒ sometimesΒ wake and bloom
to petaled wholeness, wide and sweet
to scent the other side of sleep

I breathe the perfumed wildness, keep
desire the other side of sleep

***A kyrielle, which is what we are crafting at Dverse today.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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65 Responses to the other side of sleep

  1. ruleofstupid says:

    I love ‘truth that flees but comes unbidden’
    new and yet instantly recognisable. πŸ™‚
    I like this form, very evocative / nostalgic.

    • Oh–I love the crown and pipe, Mike! Hmmm. I read last night we were trying our kyrielles today, a form I know little to nothing of, but that first stanza actually woke me up at 3 this morning, so my brain was busy early this morning πŸ˜‰

      Glad you like it. I love the lines that wake me up, when that happens.

  2. davidtrudel says:

    Very nice, it flows divinely. The verses are truly inspired.

  3. Beautiful rhyming! You do it so eloquently Susan.

  4. brian miller says:

    i breathe the perfumed wildness…
    ha…i like your end lines….really like the cadence and rhythm in this..you really worked it well…that first verse is a nice hook too…

  5. Aria says:

    Ahhh..the seduction of sweet sleep. Well done.

  6. janehewey says:

    your voice rings clearly. this poem reads so easily I captured tiny moments of glistening as I went … especially quiet looms and petaled wholeness. wonderful.

  7. Sometimes I think poems are waiting to be found inside us and other times I think they are so forceful they blow themselves into existence. This is one of those that had to be said and did so beautifully in the confines of this poem. Well written and well said. Thank you!

  8. The last 6 lines – wow – what a talented person you are Susan ..I’m afraid you will break out in a rash with mine πŸ™‚

  9. Laurie Kolp says:

    I love your refrain, Susan. Hope you have a wonderful Christmas holiday!

  10. How pleasingly rounded to wake from sleep to write a poem about sleep that brewed while you slept…it’s a lovely one too πŸ™‚

  11. cloudfactor5 says:

    Enjoyed this ! Great refrain !

  12. chrissy says:

    This is beautiful. So happy to have found you.

  13. Grace says:

    Lovely sonnet form ~ I specially like the last two lines ~

  14. wordcoaster says:

    The closing couplet is FANTASTIC–
    a huge exclamation point at the end of a well-crafted poem. πŸ™‚

  15. Mary says:

    Susan, this is just beautiful. I love thinking about ‘the other side of sleep.’

  16. claudia says:

    breathing he perfumed wildness..this is delicious susan..wonderful and strange things happen on the other side of sleep…nice..

  17. I like that you rhyme phantom and rhythm ~ nice Kyrielle ~ ‘what waits the other side of sleep?’ ~ wouldn’t we all like to know πŸ™‚

  18. vivinfrance says:

    Susan this poem is superb. I love it.

  19. Sabio Lantz says:

    The other side of sleep is a fascinating refrain. And your poem leaves it a mystery.

  20. Oh gosh this is so good, and the refrain…the otherside of sleep. Wow!

  21. Tony says:

    Wow! A kyrielle and a sonnet – and so beautiful. Poet envy!

  22. franzad says:

    oh, so beautiful. reminded my of a painting by Salvadore Dali.
    “The other side of sleep” an inspiring thought to ponder over…
    so enjoy your writing. And the way you used the form.

  23. tigerbrite says:

    I love ‘summoned through magic coiled and deep’. Our deep subconscious connecting with supraconscious.

  24. kaykuala says:

    I breathe the perfumed wildness, keep
    desire the other side of sleep

    Not many included this couplet.at the end. It created a fitting conclusion as suggested by Gay. Beautiful write Susan!

    Hank

  25. nelle says:

    Love your explorations… it indeed flows well.

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