Most of what we seek is hidden
truth that flees, but comes unbidden
summoned through magic, coiled and deep–
that waits the other side of sleep
the pain we carry is phantom,
echoed in remembered rhythm
embedded in these nerves that weave
what waits the other side of sleep
the threads we twine with quiet looms
to fabric sometimes wake and bloom
to petaled wholeness, wide and sweet
to scent the other side of sleep
I breathe the perfumed wildness, keep
desire the other side of sleep
***A kyrielle, which is what we are crafting at Dverse today.
Susan Daniels Poetry 
I love ‘truth that flees but comes unbidden’
new and yet instantly recognisable. 🙂
I like this form, very evocative / nostalgic.
Oh–I love the crown and pipe, Mike! Hmmm. I read last night we were trying our kyrielles today, a form I know little to nothing of, but that first stanza actually woke me up at 3 this morning, so my brain was busy early this morning 😉
Glad you like it. I love the lines that wake me up, when that happens.
Very nice, it flows divinely. The verses are truly inspired.
David, thank you. I love it when sleep provides the inspiration…
Beautiful rhyming! You do it so eloquently Susan.
Oh, thanks, Jennifer. Normally I get a rash from rhymes/forms, but I like the discipline of forms once in a while. Glad you liked it!
i breathe the perfumed wildness…
ha…i like your end lines….really like the cadence and rhythm in this..you really worked it well…that first verse is a nice hook too…
thank you, Brian. This was a gift from that other side of sleep as I went to bed thinking of a kyrielle, and those first lines woke me up 😉
Ahhh..the seduction of sweet sleep. Well done.
Thank you, Aria!
your voice rings clearly. this poem reads so easily I captured tiny moments of glistening as I went … especially quiet looms and petaled wholeness. wonderful.
Jane, thank you!
Sometimes I think poems are waiting to be found inside us and other times I think they are so forceful they blow themselves into existence. This is one of those that had to be said and did so beautifully in the confines of this poem. Well written and well said. Thank you!
Thank you Gay, so much! Yes–I went to sleep thinking about kyrielles and the first stanza woke me up at 3 😉
Thank you so much and I so enjoyed this prompt!
The last 6 lines – wow – what a talented person you are Susan ..I’m afraid you will break out in a rash with mine 🙂
Hee, hee–I am sure I will not, but thanks so much!
I love your refrain, Susan. Hope you have a wonderful Christmas holiday!
Thank you, Laurie–hope you have a wonderful Christmas, too!
How pleasingly rounded to wake from sleep to write a poem about sleep that brewed while you slept…it’s a lovely one too 🙂
Aw, thanks. You’ll find a few things on this blog that rhyme–when I am forced to 😉
It works here. Like you, I am a bit cautious about rhyme: I’ve always written free form too apart from the odd haiku. I know that experimenting with rhyme and form would make me a better poet, but I never care about that when I’m writing. It would feel a bit like the writing equivalent of thinking about how I want my hair styled whilst giving birth! I write because I am inspired to write but it’s a real dichotomy: I don’t want to lose that, but I do want to be a better poet, with a greater breadth and span. Anyway, this has inspired me to try and do something different…thanks 🙂
🙂 most welcome. If you click on the Dverse link you can see what the other poets came up with for this form…
Most interesting link…thanks…I’d like to try this form sometime…or one of the others…
Awesome–my favorite is the pantoum at this point–I did one with no rhymes at all, but the repetition really worked well. Of course, you can make it rhyme 😉
Whoa! This is dense…the repetition gives it texture….does something to the brain…it’s almost like extra punctuation. I think I might find this an easier place to start. The kyrielle feels beyond me atm. Really liking this 🙂
Great–have fun with it–it is a great form!
Phew! It’s hard: this one could keep me up for hours! Will have to return to this tomorrow and try to finish. Thanks for the inspiration: I’ve been struggling to write anything for a few days and this has got me up and running again. Warm thoughts. FaTW
Hugs to you–don’t tire yourself with it, have fun!
We can do both! I love the discipline that form poetry imposes – it sharpens the skills of word choice and rhythm – but I also love to let rip in free form. Often for me a form poem will morph into free verse and visa versa. My kyrielle did exactly that!
You must be very clever: I’ve been trying to write a pantoum for 3 days and it keeps turning into free verse without bending into any other sort of shape! :-0
LOL, here’s what you need for a pantoum–a wonderful, strong opening line that will serve well as a close. It is really all in the repetition of the words that the beauty comes out.
You make it sound so simple! 😉
It’s really not–it is a tricky form. i like to use it when I have a few very strong lines that really are not going anywhere on their own.
Mine is almost finished and it really isn’t as crafted as it should be given how much time I’ve spent on it! It’s 1am here so will try and finish it tomorrow. It’s been fun though and a real stretch…
cool–I am glad you’re enjoying it.
Enjoyed this ! Great refrain !
Thank you!
This is beautiful. So happy to have found you.
Chrissy–thank you. Nice to meet you!
Lovely sonnet form ~ I specially like the last two lines ~
Grace, thank you!
The closing couplet is FANTASTIC–
a huge exclamation point at the end of a well-crafted poem. 🙂
Oh gosh, thank you!
Susan, this is just beautiful. I love thinking about ‘the other side of sleep.’
Mary, thank you so much!
breathing he perfumed wildness..this is delicious susan..wonderful and strange things happen on the other side of sleep…nice..
Thank you, Claudia–they do, and I am off to explore that world shortly.
I like that you rhyme phantom and rhythm ~ nice Kyrielle ~ ‘what waits the other side of sleep?’ ~ wouldn’t we all like to know 🙂
Thanks, Polly…I have to sneak a slanty rhyme in at least one line 😉 Glad you liked.
Susan this poem is superb. I love it.
Viv, thank you!
The other side of sleep is a fascinating refrain. And your poem leaves it a mystery.
Thank you, Sabio.
Oh gosh this is so good, and the refrain…the otherside of sleep. Wow!
Dianne, thanks so much!
Wow! A kyrielle and a sonnet – and so beautiful. Poet envy!
Oh, gosh, Tony…blushing over here–thanks!
oh, so beautiful. reminded my of a painting by Salvadore Dali.
“The other side of sleep” an inspiring thought to ponder over…
so enjoy your writing. And the way you used the form.
Franza–thank you so much!
I love ‘summoned through magic coiled and deep’. Our deep subconscious connecting with supraconscious.
Yes, exactly. Thanks for liking 😉
I breathe the perfumed wildness, keep
desire the other side of sleep
Not many included this couplet.at the end. It created a fitting conclusion as suggested by Gay. Beautiful write Susan!
Hank
Hank, thank you so much!
Love your explorations… it indeed flows well.
Nelle, thank you. This one was a gift.