1.
no dry is deeper
sun steals water from our mouths
sieves our cactus skin
2.
you leave me empty
& broken, the robin’s egg
craving its yolk
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wow Susan.. simply undeniably wow. Homerun on both
Audra–thank you! I was just going to do the one and then my quirky mind said–hmmm–one word, two meanings. had to do the second one…
well done my friend. Your depth is unmatched
Oh, my…you are SO kind to me. Hey–here’s an image I didn’t use for either (changed prickly pear to cactus to conform to haiku format), but I am thinking you could do something fantastic with a desert haiku using prickly pear…
my mind keeps going to dessert not desert. I tried already and i kept thinking pie cookies and ice cream .. as if i did not eat enough yesterday
Hah–I know what you mean. At least my daughter finished up the mince last night. I did the same thing this morning–mind kept traveling from desert to dessert–hence the prickly pear, perhaps–it is after all food. Probably a result of our feast day yesterday 😉
2 fantastic examples of haiku. Well done.
Terry–thanks so much!
Nice usage.
Thanks, Nelle.
Well done! Especially loved “cactus skin”
Oh, thank you!
Very clever, for some reason I see a double meaning in yolk. Was that intended in your poem? Love can be a yolk around the neck!
Oh, thank you! Was not intentional on my part, but there is certainly word play between yoke and yolk…
Awesome! The first one was so thoughtful and creative!
oh, thank you so much SA!
I love the set…great images for cactus skin and robin’s egg ~
Thanks, Grace.
Lovely as usual 😉
Thank you, Brudberg.
The intensity of these haiku left me breathless…honestly, I could feel myself taking shallow breaths!
Goodness, thank you!
Both meanings run deep, moving, the first set is awesome!
Awesome–thanks very much!
Excellent, Susan. I thought of Desert, as in the first one, but never desert. 🙂
Thanks, Celestine. Now, my thoughts are turning to dessert 😉
Wonderful examples of haiku.
I think I especially like the robin’s egg image. It is the blue of those eggs that stands out for me; so with the broken blue, I see a globe of water drained of its essence.
Jeremy–gorgeous interpretation, and that is exactly what I hoped to convey here.
You definitely did it well. . . not surprisingly. 🙂
Wow!
No empty is emptier
When you take it I am broken
Thanks, Susan.
Your haiku screams DESERT so beautifully Susan!
Deserted dreams breathe on me
Thank you, Pranita.
Brilliant, a masterpiece for a ‘dry’ topic, Susan..
I have not submitted anything this week, just going round, admiring – ♥