the artist & the artisan

my head aches

the artist
& the artisan clash
here, where 1
plans ground cherry jam
the color of honey

to spread this winter over hot bread
baked on a stone
those days oven-heated time
softens like a Dali clock

while the other,
the other hums in a corner
stitches words into ink patchworks.
you can call it poetry.  she calls it
sewing oats or sowing
a seamed wholeness

& maybe she will
paint honey on your skin for tasting
but now, not after snow
because love poetry is im-

& refuses to set
or is it gel–

difficult to know
whether we jar words
or write jams

it’s all in the boil
take the poet
out of the poetry
& the lover out of the poem

what’s left?

last night
i told you about wasabi
& how i like heat

when i am expecting it,
not that first time i saw it
curled against sushi & thought
it was avocado

some mistakes burn
before they teach us
to not trust our eyes

to go deeper

anything’s possible
so look past the obvious

***at Dverse we are toying with the surreal, and with high and low art.  Here is my little attempt.

This is what ground cherries look like–not a cherry from a tree!

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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56 Responses to the artist & the artisan

  1. boomiebol says:

    I admire your creativity with words very much

  2. brian miller says:

    take that out and you dont got much left….its heart that makes the words sing, be it jelly or jam….i do love some on toast and cherry works for me…but a little honey on skins not a bad thing at all either…smiles.

  3. Good to see you playing with new forms

  4. Grace says:

    I like this part ~

    it’s all in the boil
    take the poet
    out of the poetry
    & the lover out of the poem

    I won’t be writing for sure ~ Nice one ~

  5. nico says:

    Anything’s possible–yes! Great poem all around.

  6. unfetteredbs says:

    I love love LOVE this Susan. The play on words.. the images and movement. You continue to churn out such great stuff Susan.

  7. i actually know a thing about two minds warring in a head 🙂 I liked this. Great , metaphor. Always enjoy your voice.

  8. If you are as good at cooking as you are with words, I’d be impatient too 🙂
    Great reply to the prompt Susan.

  9. This is fantastic! I love where you went with the prompt and want to take a moment to say this is all about your exploration as a poet not anyone else’s expectations so you are as ‘postmodern’ as you should be no matter what, you decide how you want to experiment. I’ll sit back and appreciate your artistry and intelligence :D.

  10. Susan says:

    What you have found in the comparisons between the writer and the jelly maker is a recipe for profound second looks. God bless you! I love:
    “the other hums in a corner
    stitches words into ink patchworks
    you can call it poetry. she calls it
    sewing oats . . . ” and
    “difficult to know
    whether we jar words
    or write jams

    it’s all in the boil
    take the poet
    out of the poetry
    & the lover out of the poem

    what’s left?”
    I promise to look again.

    • Susan says:

      I am sorry that I keep forgetting to use the words from your list. Here are good ones for this: debate, consideration, meeting, thesaurus. Please add these words to your list: fire, nourishment, honey, jar, wilderness.

    • Susan, thank you! I really had quite a bit of fun with this. yes, make sure you look twice–wasabi instead of avocado was a violent lesson 😉

  11. leahJlynn says:

    Your really working the prompt for this evening! wOw

  12. nice…love how you mix the different things here…the wasabi made me smile but also a cool life lesson…my fav, fav, fav part was..
    to spread this winter over hot bread
    baked on a stone
    those days oven-heated time
    softens like a Dali clock

  13. really interesting how you worked your lines here. Very cool use of language and phrase. Really nice response to the prompt.

  14. Mohana says:

    absolutely adore this!

  15. Laurie Kolp says:

    Love all the contrasts throughout…

  16. Trent Lewin says:

    Well done Susan – this was a really good one.

  17. BroadBlogs says:

    Yeah, I’ve done the wasabi/avocado mix-up, too. Not pleasant. Good to keep in mind that things aren’t always as they seem.

  18. janehewey says:

    this has a deft clip to it. I loved reading this, Susan and I learned more about how the prompt has appealed to other poets…TY! ‘whether we jar words or write jams’ brilliant~

  19. Gay Cannon says:

    This did it for me. Of all I’ve read so far, I wish I’d written yours the most. (Though they’ve all been really good), but your just W O R K S, all that word play, word change, now you see it, now like a Cheshire cat it’s gone…that’s pretty much genius! WOW.

  20. nelle says:

    Good one.

    And on a related tangent, I dislike corned beef, won’t go near it… always thought of it as fake ham. Now the jam, mmmm.

  21. kelly says:

    oh i love this, pouring down the page like honey, just fabulous!

  22. festivalking says:

    My goodness, you killed it Susan! 😀

    I am awed at your piece… very surreal!

  23. Susan, I always read your poetry wide-eyed with amazement. 🙂

  24. doncarroll says:

    nicely done susan !

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