that story of us

Posted on October 25, 2012 by Susan L Daniels

that geography between us
spanning this want
can disappear in days
with one word

the theme
hums its own clichéd music,
fate rolls hexagonal dice
in a karmic dare–

will these two
small things
find a way to each other?

i would rather
maybe say sometimes
we can twist probable
from impossible

& now you fly to me

i want no nevers, shouldn’ts
or maybes
in the way of this yes

***the octpowrimo prompt was for a love story, and I give you one, without ever saying love, and using just one cliché to toy with–just because it’s fun.

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
This entry was posted in New Free Verse and tagged , , . Bookmark the permalink.

26 Responses to that story of us

  1. davidtrudel says:
    October 25, 2012 at 1:35 am

    This resonates with me…

  2. Lena Corazon says:
    October 25, 2012 at 2:37 am

    I agree with Beth–that opening just pulls me in. The last verse is something I really love, too, with the uttering of that “yes.” This is so lovely, Susan.

  3. vivinfrance says:
    October 25, 2012 at 3:24 am

    That last stanza is a peach of a poem. Crowns the rest!

  4. Green Speck says:
    October 25, 2012 at 4:04 am

    This was just what the prompt meant … brilliant !!!

  5. unfetteredbs says:
    October 25, 2012 at 5:06 am

    this is was sweet good Susan. One can really feel the pull to yes. The longing of love…

  6. Noel Ihebuzor says:
    October 25, 2012 at 2:42 pm

    You do wonderful things with words – you weave , spin, paint so beautifully, making the words come alive and in doing so tease and then awaken the senses of your reader.
    “Fate rolls hexagonal dice”, “geography spanning a want” and the close out lines…wow, intense and overflowing with meaning
    well done, Susan

    • Susan L Daniels says:
      October 25, 2012 at 2:47 pm

      Thanks, DP (short for duet partner, not dead poet… Movie I just watched again for the thousandth time). I am enjoying these prompts and where they lead. In this case, they wanted a love story, so I decided to give one without ever using the L word…

  7. Noel Ihebuzor says:
    October 25, 2012 at 2:51 pm

    Susan, given the writer’s block I am experiencing, DUP – drying up poet, would be very apt! Lol!

  8. nelle says:
    October 25, 2012 at 8:40 pm

    Ah, humour amongst the Fates. Hope yours rolls right, but me, I prefer my fate be left to me. I’ve had quite enough of being the punch line. 😉

    • Susan L Daniels says:
      October 25, 2012 at 8:45 pm

      Oh, I have been there, too. Had a good friend that used to say he pictured God as a man wearing a very large boot, and every once in a while, said deity would notice he was moving again and step on him some again–oh look, he’s moving again…

      Not something I agree with completely, but sure is funny..

  10. shanjeniah says:
    October 26, 2012 at 3:16 am

    You reached into my soul and touched me deeply…and you are feeding the creation of my NaNo novel.

    Beautiful and poignant. Thank you for sharing!

  11. Pingback: Oh, Sandy! – ROW80 Goals Update, Oct. 28,2012 « shanjeniah

Comments are closed.