that geography between us
spanning this want
can disappear in days
with one word
hums its own clichéd music,
fate rolls hexagonal dice
in a karmic dare–
will these two
find a way to each other?
i would rather
maybe say sometimes
we can twist probable
& now you fly to me
i want no nevers, shouldn’ts
in the way of this yes
***the octpowrimo prompt was for a love story, and I give you one, without ever saying love, and using just one cliché to toy with–just because it’s fun.
This resonates with me…
The opening is perfect: “This geography between us . . . ” for we create a very unique landscape between two people when we fall in love.
Yes, we certainly do!
I agree with Beth–that opening just pulls me in. The last verse is something I really love, too, with the uttering of that “yes.” This is so lovely, Susan.
That last stanza is a peach of a poem. Crowns the rest!
This was just what the prompt meant … brilliant !!!
Thank you so much-blushing now!
this is was sweet good Susan. One can really feel the pull to yes. The longing of love…
Thanks, Audra! I think I write about it best when it is unrequited… 😉
brings out that longing.
You do wonderful things with words – you weave , spin, paint so beautifully, making the words come alive and in doing so tease and then awaken the senses of your reader.
“Fate rolls hexagonal dice”, “geography spanning a want” and the close out lines…wow, intense and overflowing with meaning
well done, Susan
Thanks, DP (short for duet partner, not dead poet… Movie I just watched again for the thousandth time). I am enjoying these prompts and where they lead. In this case, they wanted a love story, so I decided to give one without ever using the L word…
Susan, given the writer’s block I am experiencing, DUP – drying up poet, would be very apt! Lol!
Noel–how can you call it writer’s block? You are simply too busy to do much more than work & sleep… Perhaps we should call you OWP–overworked poet…
you are very kind!
Thanks 🙂 It is nice to know that sometimes speaking the truth can be a kindness… I am sticking with the OWP explanation, because someone with your creative force can never truly dry up.
Ah, humour amongst the Fates. Hope yours rolls right, but me, I prefer my fate be left to me. I’ve had quite enough of being the punch line. 😉
Oh, I have been there, too. Had a good friend that used to say he pictured God as a man wearing a very large boot, and every once in a while, said deity would notice he was moving again and step on him some again–oh look, he’s moving again…
Not something I agree with completely, but sure is funny..
Oh, thank you!
You are most welcome!!
You reached into my soul and touched me deeply…and you are feeding the creation of my NaNo novel.
Beautiful and poignant. Thank you for sharing!
Oh, thanks, Shah!
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