Don’t get carried away by this–quadrille rewrite

Posted on May 2, 2016 by Susan L Daniels

Give me 59 small stones for my pocket
and i will skip prayers across my creek
for you

that’s my faith–
in stones and things harder than stone;

pebbles my rosary
and prayer is not just inside a voice
but in it’s skipping over.

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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38 Responses to Don’t get carried away by this–quadrille rewrite

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    May 2, 2016 at 4:04 pm

    Hello Susan… it’s been a long time and I’m glad to see you back. Really love the last stanza.. I can here the clicking of the pebbles on the rosary…

  2. jillys2016 says:
    May 2, 2016 at 4:16 pm

    Ah, yes; things harder than stone – speaks volumes!

  3. UpChuckingwords says:
    May 2, 2016 at 4:41 pm

    Always enjoy your writing, Susan. Good to see you. Good meditative piece. –Audra

  4. Linda Kruschke says:
    May 2, 2016 at 4:46 pm

    I love this! Prayers are so powerful, hard as stone, and it seems you take them quite seriously. 🙂

  5. kanzensakura says:
    May 2, 2016 at 4:49 pm

    I like that your faith is stronger than stones and using the stones as your rosary. I think I shall have to borrow that from you next time I head down to our creek for peaceful meditative times. And your About….great!!!!! Thank you for responding to this prompt.

  6. Brian Carlin says:
    May 2, 2016 at 5:30 pm

    Well, that as wrath the wait! Beautifully concise and totally focused.

  7. Patti says:
    May 2, 2016 at 6:34 pm

    59 small stores for your pocket… they make me think of the prayer beads many Greeks carry in their pockets.

  8. ihatepoetry says:
    May 2, 2016 at 6:39 pm

    Now that’s wisdom!

  9. Trent Lewin says:
    May 2, 2016 at 6:55 pm

    Good to see you back, Susan, and still putting out great stuff.

  10. Grace says:
    May 2, 2016 at 6:55 pm

    Its been some time Susan, smiles ~ I admire pebbles in the rosary and specially this part:

    i will skip prayers across my creek
    for you

    Hope you are well ~

  11. whimsygizmo says:
    May 2, 2016 at 7:09 pm

    Holy cow. This is fantastic. Wonderful work here. LOVE the images.

  12. Arcadia Maria says:
    May 2, 2016 at 8:26 pm

    This was a great poem.

  13. Bodhirose says:
    May 2, 2016 at 8:39 pm

    I love that opening line and the offering of skipping stones/prayers across your creek…very kind of you. :~)

  14. lillian says:
    May 2, 2016 at 9:04 pm

    Skipping stones with prayers. Love this idea….into the ocean they go and they will be heard as they kerplunk, one by one. Angels overhead must sure hear.
    Love the idea then of pebbles in the rosary.
    Wonderful take on the prompt.

  15. katiemiafrederick says:
    May 3, 2016 at 2:55 pm

    SMiLes.. skipping reaLITy
    a sadDest SonG some
    WiLL pLay looking
    forward
    to death
    and never
    even liVing aT aLL..
    anD OMG.. imagine
    iF reincarnation iSreal
    and liFe is onLY LiVinG..
    and those
    who look
    forward
    to death
    never ever
    find heaveN NoW..
    trUly thaT WasiS thE REal
    mesSage oF tHe reportED
    Jesus.. juSt aNotHeR NatURisT
    iN ReaL oF hUwOmaniStiC pleaSure..:)

    Sorry.. that’s 60.. but sometimes limits
    don’t
    tale
    a fuLL
    story..;)10

  16. katiemiafrederick says:
    May 3, 2016 at 9:34 pm

    Thanks!.. For
    The inspiration..:)!

  17. Alice Keys says:
    May 4, 2016 at 5:43 pm

    Well done. Skip a few across the creek for me and I shall do likewise for you. It’s good to see you here.
    Alice

  18. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    May 8, 2016 at 8:16 am

    Sounds like my kind of spirituality! Deliciously described.

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