Not a Ruth and Naomi Story (a sonnet)

I never promised to go where you led
With the blind belief of a burdened beast,
My feet following any path you made.

We are not a fated twining, our threads
Spun and woven to oneness, west and east
Meeting and weaving seamless in a braid.

You, unfit to bridle wildness to tread
Steady and smooth enough to press its feet
Into unbroken ground;  ask me to wait,

And I will,  forever, and leave unsaid
My resistance to following your lead
Down any road, no matter how well-paved.

I never promised to go where you led;
I will find you, love, my own way, instead.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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38 Responses to Not a Ruth and Naomi Story (a sonnet)

  1. Tony Maude says:

    I love the story of Ruth and Naomi – one of my favourite Bible stories, not least because if you understand it, it is shocking. I also enjoyed your treatment of it in what Sam Peralta at dVerse called a trireme sonnet when he introduced this scheme over there.

    I’m kind of thinking that I’ve read something very similar – on the same theme – on your blog before, Susan – but it’s more than worth the re-read if I have.

  2. claudia says:

    i think we can follow someone in the direct and the more indirect way…. the waiting and catching up can make perfect sense… really a very interesting write susan

  3. Ah.. yes I remember that rhyme scheme.. and yes what a story you weaved here… we follow different paths in love.. hopefully meeting soemwhere…

  4. Alice Keys says:

    This is the truth of how love works out over a lifetime. Even if you had promised to follow, love still works this other way.

  5. Rhonda says:

    ain’t it the truth. beautiful sfam

  6. brian miller says:

    love is interesting…a concession at times to follow…and others to lead…
    finding love in your own way, well you just about have to , because if you follow
    another you may never find it…ah you have the rhythm down nice…i did not…ha

    • I’m looking forward to reading yours later 😉

      Thanks so much–love is tricky. We have to be true to ourselves in it, always.

      On Thu, May 1, 2014 at 5:47 PM, Susan Daniels Poetry wrote:

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  7. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Really enjoyed this Sonnet retread; had not read it when Sam called out Sonnet back in the day. I was fairly happy with my attempt until I encountered the mastery of the form here, and elsewhere out on the trail; oh well, had some fun with it anyway, and got the rhyme scheme down OK.

    • Glenn, thank you! I will read yours later, after work, and I am sure I will love it.

      On Thu, May 1, 2014 at 5:55 PM, Susan Daniels Poetry wrote:

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  8. dkirkstokes says:

    Beautiful, Susan. Love finds its own way, and some of us are fortunate enough to be on the right path with it.

  9. biggerthanalasagna says:

    The flow in your sonnet is lovely and enticed me to follow along 🙂

  10. I love this Susan. Well crafted, and a strong poem written about a strong woman by one! Kudos.

  11. Sumana Roy says:

    enjoyed the interesting form and the strong content…

  12. Yes, we have to be true to ourselves, not what others want from us. Love is about allowing the individual to be who they are. Well done.

  13. wolfsrosebud says:

    just finish writing devo on these two ladies… an amazing story to be told

  14. BroadBlogs says:

    It’s interesting how often we hear a story over and over again and accept it and fail to question it.

  15. Susan says:

    Applause! This is offering a great gift, a coming together when both loving and ready and not for any other reason. (I managed not to think of the Dean Martin “I’ll do it my way” until the second time through.)

  16. vandana says:

    In love be a free soul…………………portrayed very nicely

  17. CC Champagne says:

    Enjoyed both the story and the rhythm of this! If this is what you’ve done in the past, you should definitely consider doing more! *smile*

  18. shanyns says:

    Susan – this is AWESOME! I LOVE it! Want it framed for my wall. Amazing.

  19. Bryan Ens says:

    I haven’t seen this sonnet form before. A trireme sonnet, if Tony’s comment is correct? Very cool! Neat spin on the Naomi and Ruth story.

  20. Nomzi Kumalo says:

    Brilliant. 🙂

  21. This is just a beautiful poem. I love the visuals on this…I can picture a movie going on in my head. Bravo! Susan…:)

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