When I first loved you,
maybe I wrote your name
on a piece of paper and floated it in honey,
or maybe I chanted it at midnight, on a night
cold as this one, where speech is visible
as breath, your name a mantra,
a whisper/song stretched under
all being, a sound given shape
to fly words to an uncaring sky.
It is not as easy to unspeak a feeling
once it has flesh, undo a fabric
spun finer than capillaries
blushing secret under skin
but it can be done. I need the words
to unlove to come, fast and sharp
as what brought us together
only this time, gently and forever.
Susan Daniels Poetry 
Susan, Superb and exquisite. >KB
KB, thank you, my friend. Crawling out of a bad place…
Lovely Susan. Sonically and emotively. Some wonderful sound-play going on here that coincides nicely with the thoughts behind the sounds.
And unfortunately, these times and chapters often as not scream when we want slow softness, and crawl when we crave speed…no?
Nice.
Thank you, Johnny…and yes, there is a disconnect from the world commensurate with our feelings, at times. That dissonance makes for some great thoughts, though 😉
Yes! Dissonance and friction. The stuff of poesy. As so well illustrated here. 🙂
Isn’t funny what bad places can do for writing what you feel. Stay warm, Daniels. And write some more, will ya.
Yes–bad places are not always bad, but needed. Will do–but I want more Dr. Seuss fairytales.
Would that I had a quarter the talent of that man… his stuff always blows me away, it’s genuinely brilliant. I just wanna tell good stories to my kids.
From the few I have seen, you tell wonderful stories to your kids.
Beautiful poem, comme d’habititude, Susan.
Got me thinking of the verse – love is forever!
forever can never be unspoken,
love is forever
its unforgotten words,
spoken in elegant whispers
hummed in different decibels
some misty, some steamy, some sugary,
some clumsy, dance and sway
before, behind and beside us
always
Beautiful, Noel 😉
Yes, the feeling is forever. It is we humans that are inconstant.
Susan,
I enjoyed this jeweled treasure you’ve offered to the world today. This poem pulled me right in and held me close till the end. I admire your deft use of language to represent and convey human experience and emotions.
Thanks for this post. All the best.
Happy New Year.
Alice
Thank you, Alice, and happy New Year to you 😉
Stay warm, poet.
You cut so deep with this one Susan. Beautiful and painful. I’m with Trent… I’ve missed your words. Be well.
Thanks, Audra. Missed you guys!
Get back to pounding the keys
welcome back dear lady
Oh, thank you Paul. Has been a crazy time.
absolutely beautiful, Susan.
especially this –>
“It is not as easy to unspeak a feeling
once it has flesh”
Thank you, Stacy.
You took me for a ride, right there, especially in the second, and I just tried to shiver the goosebumps away.
Oh, thank you, Nelle. I guess, really, some things cannot be unfelt or undone, and must just be distanced from…
I’m with you in spirit and in heart my sister…a slow crawl to the light at the end…where those that love you await to hug you on your way to the wonders just around the corner…xoxo
Aw, thanks, hon…
Keep writing, keep writing these lovely poems. You make me very glad I signed up for e-mail notification. This poem “Spelling” was pure joy to read for its art and emotion.
Aw, Beth, thank you!
I wish you a happy and fulfilled New Year, dear Susan. 🙂
When one unloves, does a hole appear or get mended? Here’s to a great 2014. —Chagall
Great comment 😉
happy 2014!