a convenient attack of sometimes

They want to meter sunlight
in a convenient attack of sometimes
where truth is less than the sum of its spin

and I am less in love with language
in favor of words: bone, cup, water;
a simple speech of blood

translating only what’s important:
arrow, sunrise, hands;

your mouth on my neck
defining yes.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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59 Responses to a convenient attack of sometimes

  1. Great and true. Thanks for posting it.

  2. Alice Keys says:

    “They want to meter sunlight” This is corporate ownership taken to the ridiculous extreme. After allowing God’s handiwork (the genetic code) to be owned and copyrighted I needed to hear something carried beyond all possibility (They haven’t done it have they, Susan?)

    Then this turns to a lovely romance poem.

    Good one, Sweetie. 🙂

  3. bwcarey says:

    simple fine words, amen

  4. you tickle and touch and tantalize – God bless your “words”

  5. What a great collection packed into 55 words. really a great start.. that meddle into a great end.. really made me think.. imagine metered sunlight..

    • Thanks, Bjorn. Well, metered sunlight is perhaps a stretch, but some utility companies here want to charge their customers with solar power for using the grid to send power into it. Hence, the metered light 😉

  6. Mary says:

    Susan, I liked this; and I think you really HAVE defined what’s important. Really enjoyed the last two stanzas.

  7. brian miller says:

    truth as less than the sum of its spin…that is a great line…ha..a speach of blood as well…and only what is important…oo la what a wonderful end…that is where no words are needed…smiles.

  8. claudia says:

    very cool images.. starts with the metering sunlight opening… the speech of blood..and then the close of course… love it

  9. Glenn Buttkus says:

    These 55 words create a poetic cosmos; deeper than first thought, the third read through propels the imagery into orbit; really enjoyed the ride, and the YouTube selection is wonderful, since I live in WA state.

  10. A great beginning and a really good array of images. Well-penned. 🙂

  11. Laurie Kolp says:

    Yes, indeed. Love this, Susan!

  12. Nara Malone says:

    There are places where they meter rain and forbid the collection of it without permits. I guess metered sunlight was bound to happen. A poets pen is a great tool for pushing back. You used it artfully here. Love the last line.

  13. Grace says:

    I specially like the opening line ~ Good 55 words Susan ~ Happy Friday ~

  14. Abhra Pal says:

    Such a bigger canvas and intense poem for 55 words. Wonderful read Susan.

  15. I am certainly in favor the words you have put together here…especially the final 2 lines. Very fine writing.

  16. billgncs says:

    strong and direct – things a man admires in a woman – a good poem

  17. margaret says:

    Had me going at the beginning (I’m inclined to think the link is a spoof…I certainly hope so).. and the ending, well – I’ve gotta agree 🙂

  18. grapeling says:

    from such acts revolt is borne. which is why the NSA, drones, and for-profit prisons are there. but a slick turn to the intimate… ~

  19. This one made me stop, pause, think. Such a crucible the form makes of thought, so that what could take tomes is expressible with so little.

  20. kaykuala says:

    Such fine write! Especially the ending, it’s is a clincher! Nicely Susan!

    Hank

  21. Susan says:

    Yes, very nice, shape and all. When we start stripping down to the essential and casting off the spinners, we get down to love/silence/touch–what nourishes.

  22. why are we always going to extremes? we weren’t born for this ~ sad!

  23. nelle says:

    “where truth is less than the sum of its spin”

    Two thumbs up for a brilliant line.

  24. Akila says:

    ironical that sometimes everything is wished to be measured and controlled knowing well that some are good as eternity!

  25. I love this! The title especially captivates me. I definitely have to catch up on your recent work.

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