If I say I loved you,
let me shade it with the metonym
a drunk tastes threaded through gin,
the orgasm a crackhead lit in his brain once
and tries to get back
every fucking time he smokes
and misses.
If I say I will miss you,
let me qualify with simile
that I will miss you like the pain
of a pulled tooth, like genital warts
bringing on cancer later, like herpes
coming back every time my guard is down
to sting the corner of my smile.
Susan Daniels Poetry 
what can I say…this is what I love about your writing, from the gut! You brave woman, love it.
Thank you! This was a welcome venting that I thought was so harsh/funny I had to share it.
I had to reblog it, I am very impressed and delighted!
Again, thanking you! I am honored, and glad to spread the message–don’t infuriate a lady poet 😉
go girl! You have inspired me.
Can’t wait to see what you do…
😉 don’t get me started!!!
Reblogged this on Heartafire and commented:
You brave woman…from the gut! love it.
the orgasm a crackhead lit in his pipe once
and tries to get back
every fucking time he smokes
and misses.
Fabulous!
Thank you! I am thinking about re-titling this “Not Exactly a Valentine’s Day Card.”
Just bought a new toothbrush!!! It’s a two-pack, want one? Bril SFAM!
Ohhhh, yes! You are SO tempting me….
Hugs!
Glad you liked this. I am alternately snarling and laughing.
snarlicious it is then!!!
snarl/smiling big
ditto
Yeah…funny…just not sure if its “haha” funny… 😉
…and I didn’t need to be reminded never to piss you off (I already knew…)!
LOVE that “sting at the corner of my smile”! Perfect ending.
Thanks, John. Glad you enjoyed that line–it is my fav. I am fairly certain it is not haha funny. More like ha(snarl)ha and get out of the way 😉
Zactly!
(…i’ll be hiding in the corner if you need me… 😉 )
Hee, hee. Thanks.
wow! You speak with anger and guts!
I love this poem of yours. 🙂
Thanks, Charlie. Had to get it out.
🙂
Did the last comment of mine went through?
I believe wrote more….:)
You did–it all went to spam. How odd.
heh-heh … perfect 😉
Thanks so much! Bit of a temper today…
I think its really powerful, so real and honest and unflinching. Reblogging
Jessica, thank you so much! I think we have all been somewhere like this once or twice. hopefully no more than that.
Indeed 🙂
Reblogged this on jessicaslavin and commented:
Wow!
so raw
Yes. i was definitely feeling a little raw when I wrote this.
TRUE LOVE! Truly lovely.
Oh, thanks for making me laugh!
chutzpah you’ve got, Susan. (He really got under your skin and I’m sure I’m putting it mildly.)
Heh. You could say that 😉