you were honey strong enough
to melt my smile–
shame that our joy
rising from a distorted
sense of being
ouch. interesting contrast…honey, which i think of as sweet, yet taking the smile..temporary joy, not fun…and distorted sense of being…nice…short, but all the elements play well together.
Thanks, Brian. Do you know what miracle berries are? They are tablets that alter taste, so a lemon tastes like the sweetest thing on earth…
A melting smile usually has a tragic impulse! Sad irony!
Very short and sweet…that’s how it happens sometimes!
Hee, hee. Yep.
This is painful and way too frequent…the kind of thing that teaches caution or, sadly, mistrust.
Thank you, Shawna!
very interesting and well played on the contrasts..hinting to more than the eye can see
Thanks Noel! Just an exploration of opposites. Miracle berries are tablets, that when eaten make us perceive acid as sweet, so a lemon tastes like the most divine thing. I had to explore that.
Thanks, Polly. I don’t do irony well.
Very sad — but the moment sounded glorious!
Excellent contrast in just a few words.
Thank you, Bjorn.
Oh, that hurts!
Shame that it was only fleeting ~
Thanks, Grace. I believe the effect of those berries that alter taste is quite brief.
Absolutely beautiful contrasts. The distorted sense of being is what catches the reader…lovely and fleeting.
Aw, thank you! I have been wanting to write about these berries for a while. When the Dverse prompt was to use irony, I could not resist.
Gorgeous imagery x
Thank you, Melanie.
Another great write added to your collection…love the irony in this!
Thank you, Katy.
Lemon juice and honey – just the thing for a cold and sore throat 🙂 I’d never heard of miracle berries until I read this post. They don’t sound like a good idea at all!
Thanks, Tony–I agree. Great for a cold and that’s it. Yes, those miracle berries are something chefs like–they can keep them 😉
Bitter sweet words 🙂
I’d never heard of these berries until now – weirdly fascinating concept.
Isn’t it? That’s why I wanted to write about them somehow.
a lemon sure does melt a smile, i can’t imagine controlling that consciously
This is an absolutely fantastic poem
Oh, wow, thank you!
I’m a lemon lover, rooting for the shunned. 😉
Oh, I love them too! Just had to use the miracle berries somehow.
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