I overdosed on miracle berries

you were honey strong enough
to melt my smile–

shame that our joy
was temporary

rising from a distorted
sense of being

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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40 Responses to I overdosed on miracle berries

  1. brian miller says:

    ouch. interesting contrast…honey, which i think of as sweet, yet taking the smile..temporary joy, not fun…and distorted sense of being…nice…short, but all the elements play well together.

  2. A melting smile usually has a tragic impulse! Sad irony!

  3. Very short and sweet…that’s how it happens sometimes!

  4. This is painful and way too frequent…the kind of thing that teaches caution or, sadly, mistrust.

  5. claudia says:

    very interesting and well played on the contrasts..hinting to more than the eye can see

    • Thanks Noel! Just an exploration of opposites. Miracle berries are tablets, that when eaten make us perceive acid as sweet, so a lemon tastes like the most divine thing. I had to explore that.

  6. Sabio Lantz says:

    Very sad — but the moment sounded glorious!

  7. Excellent contrast in just a few words.

  8. Mary says:

    Oh, that hurts!

  9. Grace says:

    Shame that it was only fleeting ~

  10. Absolutely beautiful contrasts. The distorted sense of being is what catches the reader…lovely and fleeting.

  11. Melanie says:

    Gorgeous imagery x

  12. kkkkaty1 says:

    Another great write added to your collection…love the irony in this!

  13. Tony Maude says:

    Lemon juice and honey – just the thing for a cold and sore throat 🙂 I’d never heard of miracle berries until I read this post. They don’t sound like a good idea at all!

  14. Bitter sweet words 🙂

  15. Rowan Taw says:

    I’d never heard of these berries until now – weirdly fascinating concept.

  16. zongrik says:

    a lemon sure does melt a smile, i can’t imagine controlling that consciously

    First Rose

  17. This is an absolutely fantastic poem

  18. nelle says:

    I’m a lemon lover, rooting for the shunned. 😉

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