I overdosed on miracle berries

Posted on April 4, 2013 by Susan L Daniels

you were honey strong enough
to melt my smile–

shame that our joy
was temporary

rising from a distorted
sense of being

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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40 Responses to I overdosed on miracle berries

  1. brian miller's avatar brian miller says:
    April 4, 2013 at 9:23 pm

    ouch. interesting contrast…honey, which i think of as sweet, yet taking the smile..temporary joy, not fun…and distorted sense of being…nice…short, but all the elements play well together.

  2. Gemma Wiseman's avatar Gemma Wiseman says:
    April 4, 2013 at 9:24 pm

    A melting smile usually has a tragic impulse! Sad irony!

  3. pandamoniumcat's avatar pandamoniumcat says:
    April 4, 2013 at 9:40 pm

    Very short and sweet…that’s how it happens sometimes!

  4. Victoria C. Slotto's avatar Victoria C. Slotto says:
    April 4, 2013 at 10:21 pm

    This is painful and way too frequent…the kind of thing that teaches caution or, sadly, mistrust.

  6. claudia's avatar claudia says:
    April 4, 2013 at 11:43 pm

    very interesting and well played on the contrasts..hinting to more than the eye can see

    • Susan L Daniels's avatar Susan L Daniels says:
      April 5, 2013 at 9:30 am

      Thanks Noel! Just an exploration of opposites. Miracle berries are tablets, that when eaten make us perceive acid as sweet, so a lemon tastes like the most divine thing. I had to explore that.

  9. Sabio Lantz's avatar Sabio Lantz says:
    April 5, 2013 at 5:05 am

    Very sad — but the moment sounded glorious!

  10. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    April 5, 2013 at 5:55 am

    Excellent contrast in just a few words.

  11. Mary's avatar Mary says:
    April 5, 2013 at 7:52 am

    Oh, that hurts!

  12. Grace's avatar Grace says:
    April 5, 2013 at 8:28 am

    Shame that it was only fleeting ~

  13. Georgia's avatar shrinksarentcheap says:
    April 5, 2013 at 10:58 am

    Absolutely beautiful contrasts. The distorted sense of being is what catches the reader…lovely and fleeting.

  14. Melanie's avatar Melanie says:
    April 5, 2013 at 12:38 pm

    Gorgeous imagery x

  15. Kathy Reed's avatar kkkkaty1 says:
    April 5, 2013 at 1:03 pm

    Another great write added to your collection…love the irony in this!

  16. Tony Maude's avatar Tony Maude says:
    April 5, 2013 at 3:40 pm

    Lemon juice and honey – just the thing for a cold and sore throat 🙂 I’d never heard of miracle berries until I read this post. They don’t sound like a good idea at all!

  17. readinpleasure's avatar readinpleasure says:
    April 5, 2013 at 3:56 pm

    Bitter sweet words 🙂

  18. Heather Kempton's avatar Rowan Taw says:
    April 5, 2013 at 11:56 pm

    I’d never heard of these berries until now – weirdly fascinating concept.

  19. zongrik's avatar zongrik says:
    April 6, 2013 at 12:33 am

    a lemon sure does melt a smile, i can’t imagine controlling that consciously

    First Rose

  20. mindlovemisery's avatar mindlovemisery says:
    April 6, 2013 at 10:53 am

    This is an absolutely fantastic poem

  21. nelle's avatar nelle says:
    April 7, 2013 at 10:16 am

    I’m a lemon lover, rooting for the shunned. 😉

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