with purest joy
he defiantly loves,
no altar fit to hold or burn
beautiful thought; that his sacrifice/gift is too holy for an altar. love that.
Thank you, Shrinks. It was a bugger to shrink that all down to five lines, but you got it 😉
i bet it was! i need to try that more. my words escape my fingers perhaps too often. i should simmer it down and see what’s left.
Oh, no, no, no! Let them fly–they are beautiful!
And what a gift it would be !!!
I like “no alter fit to hold”. His love is a very big gift. Lovely.
Alice, thank you! Remind me to tell you about the inspiration for this one sometime 😉
oh wow.. if love’s of that dimension, it’s an altar itself…
I agree. Certainly beyond anything carnal.
and a prize beyond rubies
It certainly is!
Things have gotten so bad: now I can’t even spell my name anymore.Sorry.
I butchered your name a few weeks ago, and felt bad about it. They way you did it, at least, it sounds pretty 😉
I like this kind of sacrificial love ~ Really well penned Susan ~
Oh, thanks so very much, Grace!
Wow, that thought is just great… I can recogize a haiku poet in your cinquain.
That shows through in our short pieces, doesn’t it (you, me, Grace, others…). Glad you enjoyed!
Beautifully meditative writing here.
Mary, thank you! I really enjoyed writing this one.
nice….really cool cinquain…and dang like how you used the altar….that is some kinda love eh?
Hey, Brian–I have to tell someone this story, it is killing me, and so, you’re it. I raise Siamese kittens. One of the women who took one of my babies into her family last year just sent me a picture of him (via some kind of smart phone) and in her comment–I know she meant to say “he definitely loves us,” but it came over as “he defiantly loves us,” and I was captured by that thought. That led to this little cinquain 😉
Lovely… defiantly loves really has me thinking.
Thank you, Laurie–the phrase enchanted me when I saw it too (pls read Brian’s comment for the backstory 😉 )
You say so much within these few words – very moving.
Rowan, gosh, thank you!
This one is really cool. The last two verse are powerful.
Thank you, Jessica!
a prayer poem I think….;)
Katy–yes, it is.
Beautiful thoughts! 🙂
Another spiritual reminder. Nice.
Thanks, Gavin. Must be something int he air over here. Glad you liked.
Wonderful- you did a great job capturing something that cannot be caught. Joyful!
Thank you! Sometimes we spend hours/days/weeks/months waiting for just the right translation. This one was a gift.
You really set yourself a huge challenge – trying to encapsulate God’s love for us in just 22 syllables! I don’t know quite how you managed it – but you did. And I think ” he defiantly loves” us is perfect – he loves even when we don’t want his love.
Tony, thank you! You hit it right on the head; however, I had no idea what I was about until it was done. Perhaps it was divine inspiration.
you describe here the essence of unconditional love, Susan
Yes! A love that is there No. Matter. What.
you are good woman …real good 🙂
Audra, thank you! This one was a gift. I love when inspiration strikes from an unexpected source!
This one made me misty eyed. Beautiful Suan. Shared on Twitter, FB, and Google+
Gretchen, thank you! Now I am a dozen shades of pink. So glad you liked this one!
Apparently I was so captivated I spelled your name wrong (silly iPhone) whoops
Ironically, a silly iPhone oops was what inspired this one–someone sent me a message where she said her kitten “defiantly loves” her. She met definitely, but that combination of words caught me, and I had to use it.
That is ironic 🙂
I love those small, wonderful gifts from the universe that put my muse on alert instantly. kind of the way my cats all come running the second I attach a can to the can opener.
Jules, thank you.
sometimes obedience is the sacrifice ~ magnificent Susan !
Thank you, Deb. This one was such a gift.
Lovely and what a cool inspiration story!
Thank you, Heidi!
makes me ask lots of questions!
Yes–a love that exists whether it is wanted or not, almost a rebellion.
Now that must be one great sacrifice! I love this poem… seems like there is so much thought packed in just a few lines.
Dana, thanks. That is what I love about micropoetry, the condensing.
loved this.. no altar fit for his gift…
Oh, thank you.
“Shameless” — sounds like very earthly love which actually shuns an altar.
Besides, burning a gift has always seemed strange to me. 🙂
But I guess it is because smoke rises, as prayers are suppose to.
Beautifully said, and evoking a smile, Sabio.
Beautifully done, Susan! And, I agree!
Thanks Charles. No better love thn this.
What a fantastic sentiment you’ve hit upon. Just perfect. And lovely.
Eusebia, thank you. The genesis of the idea was random, and the poem was a gift. Does not get better than that.
Beautiful. Fit for Lent 🙂
You know, I never even thought of that, being the protestant savage that I am. We pack all our awareness of sacrifice into Good Friday. But, oh, it does fit the Lenten sentiment exactly.
Love, something amenable to shaping, neither by hands nor with boundaries, just a gift of an open heart. Nice one, but then I expect nothing less from you.
Aw, Nelle, thanks. I loved the totality of this. All from a typo in a friend’s message 😉
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