faith (a cinquain)

shameless
with purest joy
he defiantly loves,
no altar fit to hold or burn
his gift

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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72 Responses to faith (a cinquain)

  1. beautiful thought; that his sacrifice/gift is too holy for an altar. love that.

  2. Green Speck says:

    And what a gift it would be !!!

  3. Mama Zen says:

    That’s beautiful.

  4. Alice Keys says:

    I like “no alter fit to hold”. His love is a very big gift. Lovely.

  5. claudia says:

    oh wow.. if love’s of that dimension, it’s an altar itself…

  6. aorille says:

    and a prize beyond rubies

  7. aprille says:

    Things have gotten so bad: now I can’t even spell my name anymore.Sorry.

  8. I like this kind of sacrificial love ~ Really well penned Susan ~

  9. Wow, that thought is just great… I can recogize a haiku poet in your cinquain.

  10. Mary says:

    Beautifully meditative writing here.

  11. brian miller says:

    nice….really cool cinquain…and dang like how you used the altar….that is some kinda love eh?

    • Hey, Brian–I have to tell someone this story, it is killing me, and so, you’re it. I raise Siamese kittens. One of the women who took one of my babies into her family last year just sent me a picture of him (via some kind of smart phone) and in her comment–I know she meant to say “he definitely loves us,” but it came over as “he defiantly loves us,” and I was captured by that thought. That led to this little cinquain πŸ˜‰

  12. Laurie Kolp says:

    Lovely… defiantly loves really has me thinking.

  13. Rowan Taw says:

    You say so much within these few words – very moving.

  14. This one is really cool. The last two verse are powerful.

  15. kkkkaty1 says:

    a prayer poem I think….;)

  16. Beautiful thoughts! πŸ™‚

  17. Another spiritual reminder. Nice.

  18. ihatepoetry says:

    Wonderful- you did a great job capturing something that cannot be caught. Joyful!

  19. Tony says:

    You really set yourself a huge challenge – trying to encapsulate God’s love for us in just 22 syllables! I don’t know quite how you managed it – but you did. And I think ” he defiantly loves” us is perfect – he loves even when we don’t want his love.

  20. you describe here the essence of unconditional love, Susan

  21. unfetteredbs says:

    you are good woman …real good πŸ™‚

  22. This one made me misty eyed. Beautiful Suan. Shared on Twitter, FB, and Google+

  23. sometimes obedience is the sacrifice ~ magnificent Susan !

  24. heidi says:

    Lovely and what a cool inspiration story!

  25. margaretbednar says:

    defiantly loves…

    makes me ask lots of questions!

  26. danadampier says:

    Now that must be one great sacrifice! I love this poem… seems like there is so much thought packed in just a few lines.

  27. vidyatiru says:

    loved this.. no altar fit for his gift…

  28. Sabio Lantz says:

    “Shameless” — sounds like very earthly love which actually shuns an altar.

    Besides, burning a gift has always seemed strange to me. πŸ™‚
    But I guess it is because smoke rises, as prayers are suppose to.

  29. Beautifully done, Susan! And, I agree!

  30. What a fantastic sentiment you’ve hit upon. Just perfect. And lovely.

  31. Beautiful. Fit for Lent πŸ™‚

    • You know, I never even thought of that, being the protestant savage that I am. We pack all our awareness of sacrifice into Good Friday. But, oh, it does fit the Lenten sentiment exactly.

  32. nelle says:

    Love, something amenable to shaping, neither by hands nor with boundaries, just a gift of an open heart. Nice one, but then I expect nothing less from you.

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