too tired to name it

Defeated, broken
sagged set to the shoulders
I can list 100 modifiers for
and never really catch
what it means to walk
into a lit kitchen, hours late
and past the point of any
be(lie)vable excuse,
though you spun lots of them
into a flag
the color of sur(render)
but you wave it all wrong,
like you are directing a plane
to the proper strip
for landing

that’s not how
apology works.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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23 Responses to too tired to name it

  1. This sounds familiar 🙂 loved be(lie)vable excuse..loved the implication.

  2. thailand18 says:

    Broken Flag? Defeated?

  3. annotating60 says:

    I don’t have enough information…this could be a small prose piece but I like that last imagery.>KB

    • You’ve got it–This was something that flashed through my mind while I was po’d that I wanted to catch to save for later. It is a piece of something bigger I don’t have yet.

  4. unfetteredbs says:

    sagged set to the shoulders.. powerful identifiable image. Really enjoyed this one..says one woman to another( surrender– bahh and deep heavy sigh)

  5. Got a bit lost here, since I don’t know who walked in late.
    But the sense of defeat and frustration is palpable, so it doesn’t really matter

  6. Was it meant to be an apology in the first place? 🙂 Nice one

  7. Alice Keys says:

    Susan, You catch the essence of human relationship and make it dance with a thousand angels on the head of a pin. I don’t know why this one made me chuckle by the end. I suppose I’ve been there once or twice.;-))
    Alice

  8. Jeremy Nathan Marks says:

    Like KB, I am taken with the imagery you use of the apologist landing his apoligy like a plane. . . but from the runway, not from the cockpit. If you aren’t the pilot it is not your plane. . . There is some real truth here, it seems to me.

    • Oh, I like that. That might give me a direction to take this in, as I just quickly typed this out, trying to catch the movements–drooping, waving, directing. I think this is going to end up going somewhere interesting.

  9. nelle says:

    Interesting exploration. An apology should be delivered without condition and expectation, and should be irretrievable even if rejected.

  10. cfbrown (कवि) says:

    i like this and feel/felt the emotions in this one

    • Thanks, Chris! I was trying to catch the body language here–I think I am going to build on this somehow, as it was a quick sketch in charcoal to get something down. Glad you enjoyed.

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