Defeated, broken
sagged set to the shoulders
I can list 100 modifiers for
and never really catch
what it means to walk
into a lit kitchen, hours late
and past the point of any
be(lie)vable excuse,
though you spun lots of them
into a flag
the color of sur(render)
but you wave it all wrong,
like you are directing a plane
to the proper strip
for landing
that’s not how
apology works.
Susan Daniels Poetry 
This sounds familiar 🙂 loved be(lie)vable excuse..loved the implication.
Thanks, Jen.
Broken Flag? Defeated?
Kind of 😉
Broken Flags?
I don’t have enough information…this could be a small prose piece but I like that last imagery.>KB
You’ve got it–This was something that flashed through my mind while I was po’d that I wanted to catch to save for later. It is a piece of something bigger I don’t have yet.
sagged set to the shoulders.. powerful identifiable image. Really enjoyed this one..says one woman to another( surrender– bahh and deep heavy sigh)
Yeah–men. He should know by now to open the door, and put his baseball cap on the end of a yardstick and slide that through the doorway. If it comes back to him intact and not torn to shreds, it’s safe to come in 😉
haa haa dumbasses
🙂
Thought I had him trained by now…
Got a bit lost here, since I don’t know who walked in late.
But the sense of defeat and frustration is palpable, so it doesn’t really matter
It’s okay to be lost–it is a fragment, unfinished, and I’m fleshing it oot today.
Was it meant to be an apology in the first place? 🙂 Nice one
Nope–I think he was trying to direct forgiveness. Glad you liked my fragment.
Susan, You catch the essence of human relationship and make it dance with a thousand angels on the head of a pin. I don’t know why this one made me chuckle by the end. I suppose I’ve been there once or twice.;-))
Alice
Thanks Alice–I am glad it make you chuckle–there is black humor in this one. Probably going to be part of a larger piece.
Like KB, I am taken with the imagery you use of the apologist landing his apoligy like a plane. . . but from the runway, not from the cockpit. If you aren’t the pilot it is not your plane. . . There is some real truth here, it seems to me.
Oh, I like that. That might give me a direction to take this in, as I just quickly typed this out, trying to catch the movements–drooping, waving, directing. I think this is going to end up going somewhere interesting.
Interesting exploration. An apology should be delivered without condition and expectation, and should be irretrievable even if rejected.
Exactly.
i like this and feel/felt the emotions in this one
Thanks, Chris! I was trying to catch the body language here–I think I am going to build on this somehow, as it was a quick sketch in charcoal to get something down. Glad you enjoyed.