I believe bloom
and know of red
and have a passing acquaintance
with thorns
but there is more to this
being a rose
than what’s visible
and I know nothing
of what those roots touch
I believe bloom
and know of red
and have a passing acquaintance
with thorns
but there is more to this
being a rose
than what’s visible
and I know nothing
of what those roots touch
Profound – the roots of the rose haven’t yet been touched by thorns … what lies below the surface – ‘unsoiled’ has also felt no pain. (my 2 bobs) nice Sus.
Thanks, Jen.
So few words
To say so much
Your verbal dexterity
Is as precise as a gymnast
Defying gravity
With a flourish
David–can you please message me your wordpress user ID–I want to send you an invite…
Love your comment!
Are you so sure of that? What makes you wonder Susan – and what makes you sure?
hee, hee–and so we move from epistemology to the root of the rose, which makes me say I have no ownership of wonder and nothing is sure–only that I am looking at a rose in a vase, so I think it is there. Unless I dreamed it.
And so we transfer the traverse across the width of the pipe to measure the flow of human soul; and wonder becomes what we were and not what we are; and the flower grows. It grows and grows and grows. And what do we know? That it grows. And grows.
We dreamed it. We stood aside of it. We were inside of it. We grew. And grew. And grew. And then we got here. That’s when we were sure. And surely certainty has something to say on the subject.
Trent, that is BEAUTIFUL. I have a feeling perhaps you sat yourself down to write?
Or got drunk? Is there a difference? I have a hard time telling anymore. As long as we laugh. And as you say, dream. Peace, Susan, and a good poem. Peace.
Oh, whatever you did–go write, my buzzed northern friend, and I will enjoy the results. Glad you liked this.
Very well. I appreciate good counsel. I am not sure of spelling at the moment. I see in blue an old lady throwing darts. There is a dart in my foot, so that is appropriate. And she bakes. And she is cordial. But why is she like that? Her child baffles her. And she is not sure of her friends. But when you are old, what choice do you have? What do you do? What do you talk about? Same questions we all have: “Where am I going? How much time do I have?” Even robots suffer. They expire. But they feel differently about it than we do, and that is the crux of the question, the question of why they might feel the need to do so, or feel the need to think so in the first place. Baffling. Here’s a cab. Here’s a wave, filled with water. The wave is dead! It lives on.
I now have a Trent burst in my comments. I thank you for it and hope you are curled in your chair, blissfully asleep.
Blissfully in bed now, but it was a long haul.
Your words say it all … magic yet again !!!
Thank you.
Oh my word, you are SO good! “a passing acquaintance with thorns” is brilliant. And your last two lines. This is short enough and sharp enough to cut open my arm and burrow in for later recall throughout the day. I’m really impressed with you.
But try as I might to control my brain, I keep reading the title as “epesiotomy.” Sorry. 😉
LOL, that’s okay–some experiences will scar us 😉
I really like the way those first two verses open this poem:
I believe bloom
and know of red
Would you consider doing another version of this with the same meric/rhythmic footing as these first lines? I could see this going in a Tennyson/Burns direction.
I say this not because I want to suggest that you make your words sound like someone else’s, but rather because I think this poem has a lot of potential and could be done in a number of ways. Any thoughts?
Oh, I so love this idea! Can you elaborate a bit?
This was inspired by Bernadette Mayer’s writing experiments, where she encouraged us to:
Using phrases relating to one subject or idea, write about another,
pushing metaphor and simile as far as you can. For example, use science
terms to write about childhood or philosophic language to describe a shirt.
So I tried to use philosophic language to describe a rose. I could also describe the rose via other disciplines, and really open this out in an unusual way.
Your poems ought to be studied in a lit class. 🙂 I can imagine the fevered excitement and analysis. Well done
Celestine, that is wonderful of you to say, but there are so many excellent poets out there that deserve this more than my slapped out drafts do. that being said, you have turned me into a tomato again, and now I am going to have to show you how it looks when it is no longer a draft.
For me you are among the best :-). I can’t wait.
You are a WONDERFUL woman. Just don’t praise me too much, or I will get lax and lazy 😉
Epistemology is the study of knowledge. By what conduit do we know what we know?
~Theodore Bikel
Your short poems always make me happy and see such great progress in your writing. 🙂
Thanks, Charlie!
You are welcome…:)
Wanting so much more… perfect.
Nelle, thank you.
Susan,
I love your vibrant rose image.There is much to be unfolded between bud and bloom.
Alice
Thank you, Alice. It is an interesting exercise, to describe a thing using language from a different discipline–this is my attempt at describing a rose using philosophical terms.