are blameless, tell the story
of wind moving sea
A beautiful stormy haiku 🙂
Thank you, GS!
Indeed. One wonders how Doppler technology would present Kansas when houses fly past a bicycle pedalled by someone of pointed hat and broom, on the transition to a yellow roads.
Oh, wow–what a thought!
Damn poor editing there nelle. ‘a place of yellow roads’.
Hey–I like both versions 😉
I tried haiku once. I’m glad someone is much better at it than me!
Oh, thanks, Georgia! I like the discipline of the form.
stormy sea. Well done Susan
i like wind-moving sea!!! 🙂
Stuck in race of time
Interesting way to put a storm out on paper 😉
Thanks, Leo 😉
nature’s breath swirling
crude, blowing like raw rude bellows,
leaving spaces nude
Ohhh, even nicer, Noel!
a great response – but maybe ditch the word ‘like’ to meet the limit of syllables and possibly strengthen you haiku.
nb you could also enter your own haiku on the current theme at haiku-heights.blogspot.com.au
see you there
He should–he has written some beautiful haiku!
Are storytellers always blameless? I wonder…
Still the Storm
fun 6-7-5 style.
So glad this is single verse!
LOVED the modern radar image — definitely not a Thoreau image. 😉
LOL, definitely not 😉
I make it 5 but it depends how you treat ‘swirled’, which would, outside a deliberate poetic delivery be (for me) monosyllabic.
ps. how does it take a word of six syllables to describe a word of one – an oxymoron?
Here, in WNY, it is 5 syllables, but it would depend–Will Shakespeare might have swirl-ed to hit an iamb…
Radar! You’ve perfectly described a 21st century storm in terms a generation younger than I, can relate to! I love it!
Oh, thank you! Had some fun!
So many more strange happenings than those we often see. One should not be taken in by just a few!. Nicely said Susan!
Hank, love the comment & thanks for the visit!
haha a scientific haiku with all radars… ha I love it Susan..
Thank you, Tarun!
Mostly blue on the radar over UK at the moment x Lovely haiku x very clever x
🙂 thanks for liking.
Loved the thought, yes radar is both innocent and incapable of depicting the storm.
Nice way of depicting a storm, and those radar images sure are beautiful.
wind moving sea….beautiful!
radar-swirled clouds – very unique!
I watch Doppler profiles all the time and occasionally just sit after a long night watching the swirls stepping through on their restricted forecast sequence or freeze-frame on a particularly aesthetic synoptic. I haven’t yet composed poetry over one so you beat me hands down there! Great stuff.
ps. I could ruin the romance of the question of how houses would show – but I won’t!
Oh, you should totally write it–I have barely scratched the surface here…
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