I have looked into
hurricane eyes
& found the pause
you call peace
that I call breathing deep
an energy save
between screams
don’t get used
to the quiet
it breaks easy
I have looked into
hurricane eyes
& found the pause
you call peace
that I call breathing deep
an energy save
between screams
don’t get used
to the quiet
it breaks easy
I like the undertone message here
Thanks, Boomie!
Love this!
Oh, thank you! Were we on the same wavelength today–I see you have a post for today titled “Listen, I can see you.” 🙂 Checking it out now!
“it breaks easy” – a really powerful conclusion !!!
Thank you, Green!
You pack a powerful punch with your words – love the ending!
Sheila, thank you!
oh true that…it does break easy…so we have to enjoy those peaceful breaks all the more…
Yes, we do!
powerful tone here Susan really liking it
Thank you, Bruce.
Is this a promise or a threat? Thread it darkly, Susan. Quiet is way over-rated. Nice bit of poetry, gave me a bit of a shiver.
Trent, thank you. I like to make you shiver 😉
Susan, this was a nice piece. With all due respect, I think yousell yourself short too often. It is seems as if you are appreciative of the gods or whomever, just to have had a primary idea for a piece. The more time I’ve spent with your poetry the more I see the potential for using these lightning rods of inspiration to collect more fire. I don’t do much except write, so I don’t know what time constraints you have, butI think you could expand on any one of the fragments you write and see if what doesn’t come of it a new way of approaching your work. And it is work. I can’t tell you how often a small idea has grown intosomething larger, taking much time and energy, only in the end to find it going into my bone yard file. But when exception arises all the rest is forgotten–for at least a few hours.I think that there is enough ‘fragment’ and ‘micro’ pieces out there. What is needed is Poetry!>KB ps: I’ll shut up now.
KB, I will never ask you to shut up–I value your thoughts too much and am grateful when you share them. I will have to think about this, as I usually end the piece when I think I have said all I need to; but, in fact, what’s the harm of going a little deeper, or longer? None at all.
Poetry is as much about discovery when writing as it is in reading. I only mentioned what I did because you have a talent (bad word) is the way you see things. Within that talent is the ability to ask questions of yourslf. Listen to the questions, some may be aswers.,>KB
Good point & again thanking you!
Good stuff SuPorn (still searching for the right name!) Strong and so true.
I have been torn
From my foundations
Hurled bodily
eyes tight and fighting
To wake abandoned
An holistic orphan
Between dreams
Amazed to find
I’m where I should be
Until the next wind
On, love it, Mike!
This really got to me!
thanks, Jules.
Such a soft poem that says so much. Great
Thank you, Danny.
Hmmmmm, Hmmmm! still breathing the calm!
🙂 thanks, Noel.
Great metaphor…there is so much truth in this, Susan.
Thank you, Victoria. Stormy lives…
What a beautiful silence within –where you write from! ALWAYS a privilege to read. xo
Thanks, Deb!
So ominous in the feel…
Yes…the phrase hurricane eyes just popped in my head & I had to do something with it…
Too deep
Not just storm chasing
Makes me think of my bungi jumping days….
Crazy hobby…
Your undertone lady , say a lot..
Love it
Thanks so much–glad you liked it!