if i parse myself in pieces
they never add up to pretty

still, this skin
that burns and never tans
is the same that sings
under your hands

& my lips’ bare thinness
parts to let tongues twine
in a dancing kiss

my breasts
have fed 2 babies
with their heaviness
but still crest pleasure
where they meet your mouth

& these toes,
tapering from flat feet
& legs that need waxing
are too long to frame pedicures well
but still curl when i come

they know
i am the sum of this body

a feeling we evoke

in spite of imperfection

in parts

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
This entry was posted in New Free Verse and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

41 Responses to unvarnished

  1. Bruce Ruston says:

    Steamy Susan. Except that sounds like a super hero name:)

  2. ruleofstupid says:

    You are naughty! You didn’t lie 🙂
    Like this a lot, although I’ve had to wash my brain – dirty thing 😉 Because it’s the whole point isn’t it – we are not ‘pictures’ but real bodies, and it’s what we mean for each other that creates passion – which hollywood et al ignores for the pretty vacancy.

  3. Susan, Gush, warm, steamy, naughty but nice. The message of your poem as I see it is

    Complicit mind
    over matter imperfect,
    mind in matter,
    matter under mind
    matter with mind,
    imperfect matter rolled up
    kneaded soft hard by mind,
    fused, matted and siamesed,
    spiralling to fused mutual perfecting
    and that is all that matters
    for the whoops, the swooshes,
    crests, waves,
    the unending inebriating
    deeps, dips
    valleys and volleys

    • Oh! Yes, I would have to say you got the message, prof 😉

      Lovely alliteration, but you seem to have made it hotter in this room than it already was and I now have to excuse myself and take a long, cold shower….

  4. 🙂 ACs work well too to bring down room temperatures!

  5. Green Speck says:

    I love the subtle hints in this piece 😉

  6. Very sensual. Realistic, mother earth (who has time to wax their legs anyway?) but still… yes, sensual. Love it.

  7. unfetteredbs says:

    well well well…. love this Susan. Never wish for a Hollywood bod either.. real men want real woman. And you my dear, are REAL!

    • Ah, thank you Audra! You don’t think it is too unlike my usual stuff and will send people running away screaming, wishing they could bleach their eyes?

      • unfetteredbs says:

        laughing.. oh come on now. You are asking me???
        I love it and your readers will love it. You have to shake it up. You are one of the most versatile poets that I read. I like that you mix it up because then we all get to pick and choose. Not everyone will love everything but they will love something. If not? screw em! haaa just kidding. Seriously it is soo good. It is all natural and REAL. That is why I love it. It is YOU and it is ME

        • Thanks, Audra–for a little while tonight I wasn’t sure about this one, but I do like its real-ness 🙂

          & thanks for saying that–you are mahvelous, madam…

          • unfetteredbs says:

            I get it Susan. I have deleted a bunch of my posts because I thought I crossed a line(laughing and boy have I) but this is just plain old good woman.
            Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours. Hope you get your toes curled this weekend haaa haaa

            • Oh, I hope you put them back on, because while some of yours is suggestive, it is not out and out blatant…if anything I’d call it yummy. Speaking of yummy–hope you have a happy Thanksgiving & some nice toe-curling moments over the long weekend yourself!

  8. davidtrudel says:

    Excellent and erotic. Wow – you have taken it to a new level with this one. I love this!

  9. Trent Lewin says:

    I came back to this a couple times, was quite different. I object to the use of the word “spartan” in anything. The rest is wicked good. I wanna see what happens when you strip out the supposed defects and go for the gold.

    • 🙂 thanks, Trent. Can you give me another word that conveys a military mouth? Cos that’s what I have…glad you liked this–I think it is quite different from my usual.

      • Trent Lewin says:

        Certainly caught my eye. I think it’s amazing when people write about themselves because I can’t much do that. I like frankness of others, even if I’m too inhibited to go that route. I think you write about yourself and your life very well, and there always seems to be some different element to your perceptions or thoughts, maybe the word cerebral fits in this context (I hate that word too). Spartan options… dunno. What the heck is a military mouth anyhow?

        • 🙂 I changed it to bare, because I really didn’t care for spartan either. A military mouth is one with no excess, lean, and spare. minimalist. meaning: I have thin lips 😉

  10. I like this. I went out with a woman who was ‘Hollywood perfect’ once, though god knows what she saw in me. She used to wear a t-shirt saying ‘Fragile. Do not crush.’

  11. This is what happens when I leave you unattended for a while.. you keep evolving to the next stage 🙂

  12. Pingback: Oh crap– Sensual Blog Award..what?? « UnfetteredBS

Comments are closed.