just before sunset a woman
walking her dog tells me
she was admiring my roses, mostly over
but red in that final frantic blooming
past the first hard freeze

i nod agreement, smile
i don’t tell her
those are not my roses.
that i happen to stand
on a porch i don’t own
because i want to end our talk
before it does anything but
skim the  air between us

so i can return
to the argument
i was moderating
between my right & left brain–
the 3 of us deciding
if the moon’s thinness
was sharp enough to sliver sky
with mandolin precision

or if,  instead
we should trace that perfect curve
of planet-shadow
arcing a proud silhouette
across the moon’s face
the way that shadow waxes
when moon wanes

or both

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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20 Responses to perspectives

  1. what else is there to say but “beautiful”?

  2. unfetteredbs says:

    “skim the air between us lightly”- I really like this line. I really enjoyed this moment with you– your words always dance lightly on the surface while swimming deeper under the sea of your wonderful brain/imagination.

  3. jmgoyder says:

    I love the way you mix concrete everyday detail in with the abstract – so gifted!

    • Oh, Julie, thank you! It was just one of those moments–stepping out on my friend’s porch yesterday evening, contemplating that moon, and having that conversation. I felt they had to all blend into this.

  4. Green Speck says:

    You mould dreams and reality in such a fine concoction … loved it 🙂

  5. Trent Lewin says:

    Beautiful Susan, especially the right brain/left brain bit.

  6. You have beautiful, unique phrasing. I love ‘planet-shadow’, ‘sliver sky’ and ‘mandolin precision’. These words not only create imagery in the mind but also sound pleasing in the mouth when spoken, and to the ears when heard. That’s not easy to do. Thanks for a lovely, lovely intricate read.

  7. Leo says:

    I enjoyed the images…..but at the end….. all I could think was that the lady walking her dog might have had an answer to one of the questions or at least an interesting opinion; made me wander if we don’t isolate ourselves too much, at times?? Hey! stop that lady walking that dog! Leo

  8. splendid ! I could put this to music! Hugs

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