ghost story (conversation with trent)

I don’t think it’s me
that haunts you–
but maybe some idea of us


threads a lightning heartbeat
through your ears

& flashes patterns
in the corners of your vision

almost seen
but not there enough

to touch

I think it’s he that haunts you
The ideas all flat and unformed
Him on a mountain, him on a stool
The patterns flash of him
Alone, stolen, beholden
To the ghost of you
Where you float
As a shade
And return but fade
And he wishes to touch
Not spirit but flesh
And you whisper as he sleeps
And flee as he wakes

Who is the ghost?
Who is the penitent?
You or him
She or he
Witnesses dispute
The existence of either

I have floated patterns
on that ceiling
where he sleeps
spun my whisper
with his dreaming voice
into thread
just spoken there
but binding when awake

who can witness passion?
or accuse desire?

such crimes leave no bodies
& disappear
after eyes open


***Had to take this out of my comments on “Ghost Story,” as Trent’s poetic response to my initial poem was so great…  Trent’s voice is italicized and I am in regular typeface.  Trent, this was impromptu fun!

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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14 Responses to ghost story (conversation with trent)

  1. Trent Lewin says:

    Excellent return Susan, and a fitting ending. I really loved the beginning of this one, bit on the ephemeral side, the vague side, the scary side too maybe. Honoured to have been a participant in one of your pieces.

  2. ruleofstupid says:

    Don’t you just love a blog – great ‘conversation’ – great result.

  3. unfetteredbs says:

    nicely done you two.

  4. Rhonda says:

    love it…seems i’ve missed some good stuff while i was gone!

  5. BroadBlogs says:

    Thought provoking. Made me think of the varieties of ghosts that haunt us.

  6. reading this was like having my palm read.

  7. Martin says:

    The rhythms are interesting in this one – thanks for sharing, nice piece.

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