silence–haiku triptych

a haiku chain by Susan Daniels & Noel Ihebuzor

it echoes–
this pause before words
weighted breath

It speaks loud
the empty spaces
between words

those moments
minds falter before
sharing truth

***My friend Noel and I had a haiku conversation in the comments that I brought out into the main poem, because his response was just so lovely.  His haiku is italicized.  

 

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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40 Responses to silence–haiku triptych

  1. unfetteredbs says:

    love when you two entwine yourselves

  2. boomiebol says:

    You guys do these duets so well. Love this

  3. jmgoyder says:

    What a great idea and poem!

  4. Valli says:

    Awesome set. I’m love with the second haiku! Profound!

  5. Kodjo Deynoo says:

    I enjoyed reading this poem great work by you two

  6. I never really noticed the silence in the pauses of speech, great poem.

  7. Susan always inspires!

  8. aloha Susan – i like the observations you are making around silence, breath and words. i also like the twists you gain with the sequence of your lines in each ku. aloha.

  9. amazing way to express silence

  10. Barbara says:

    ‘Weighted breath’ speaks volumes to me today.
    Love the idea of your haiku conversation too.

  11. brudberg says:

    Lovely set, very deep insights into how silence talks. Great 🙂

  12. dulcinaandgnome says:

    Silence speaking, yes…
    Lovely chain, Susan; the pearl in the middle shines more between yours.
    A pleasure reading your haiku.
    Thanks for sharing and happy Sunday.
    🙂

  13. This is the case where two plus one equals thought provoking. Well done!

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  15. Meenakshi says:

    Hi Susan, just loved the thought running through these lines, dilemma of telling the truth.

  16. Fine collaboration, Susan

  17. Sanjana says:

    intriguing work here! conversing through haiku should be fun and challenging 🙂

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  18. Susan says:

    not a simple rule
    but pause betrays intent to
    cover or choose truth

  19. prema says:

    truly lovely !!! i loved the flow of thoughts !!!

  20. Jolly says:

    The lines merge so seamlessly, like a perfect duet. Great job guys … enjoyed it thoroughly!

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