a haiku chain by Susan Daniels & Noel Ihebuzor
it echoes–
this pause before words
weighted breath
It speaks loud
the empty spaces
between words
those moments
minds falter before
sharing truth
***My friend Noel and I had a haiku conversation in the comments that I brought out into the main poem, because his response was just so lovely. His haiku is italicized.
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love when you two entwine yourselves
too much fun, really 🙂
Glad you liked! Could not leave that in my comments.
You guys do these duets so well. Love this
thank you! His haiku reply was just too nice to stay in the comments…
What a great idea and poem!
Thank you, Julie! I loved the spontaneity of this.
Awesome set. I’m love with the second haiku! Profound!
Thank you, Vali! That second haiku by Noel is my fav too!
I enjoyed reading this poem great work by you two
Thank you, Kodjo.
I never really noticed the silence in the pauses of speech, great poem.
Thanks so much, Daisy!
Susan always inspires!
As do you, my friend!
aloha Susan – i like the observations you are making around silence, breath and words. i also like the twists you gain with the sequence of your lines in each ku. aloha.
Thank you Rick!
amazing way to express silence
Oh, thank you…this was fun!
‘Weighted breath’ speaks volumes to me today.
Love the idea of your haiku conversation too.
Thanks, Barbara–the beauty of the conversation was the spontaneity, as well as Noel writes beautiful haiku…
Lovely set, very deep insights into how silence talks. Great 🙂
Oh, thank you, B!
Silence speaking, yes…
Lovely chain, Susan; the pearl in the middle shines more between yours.
A pleasure reading your haiku.
Thanks for sharing and happy Sunday.
🙂
Oh doesn’t it, though–Noel’s is GORGEOUS!
This is the case where two plus one equals thought provoking. Well done!
Thanks!
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Hi Susan, just loved the thought running through these lines, dilemma of telling the truth.
Thank you!
Fine collaboration, Susan
thanks so much, Celestine!
intriguing work here! conversing through haiku should be fun and challenging 🙂
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Thanks, Sanjana–it was fun!
not a simple rule
but pause betrays intent to
cover or choose truth
truly lovely !!! i loved the flow of thoughts !!!
Thank you!
simply beautiful
thank you!
The lines merge so seamlessly, like a perfect duet. Great job guys … enjoyed it thoroughly!
Thank you, Jolly!