i have run those fences

i have run those fences
inside fences, casting shadows
that frame more enclosing

the borders we paint sometimes
on pickets friendlier somehow–
that gapped country smile
that seems open but hold us
apart, still guarding something priceless
without a sharply lettered KEEP OUT
or NO TRESPASSING

the message is there
just more worn down by weather
in falling-away paint chips

first shadow
then old wood/peeled latex
pushing us away
from the steel

that truly divides

***at Dverse today, we are looking at art by SueAnn, and writing whatever it inspires us to create.  Fun!

 

From Sueann’s Journey at http://wwwsueann.blogspot.com/

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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30 Responses to i have run those fences

  1. brian miller says:

    whew…nice closure on this…the steel that divides….fences can protect us but also keep us apart…i like the image as well of the fence as a gap toothed smile…you know i did not notice there were two fences in the pic until this….nice hit…

    good to see you as well…smiles.

  2. Whew, that steel one behind is the real threat, I like where you went with the prompt.

    • Anna, thank you. Yes, at first all I saw was that homey, homely picket fence with the paint peeling away. Then I saw the stronger fence behind, and out came the poem. Brian chose some great pics to inspire us, and I can’t wait to read everyone else’s takes on the art.

  3. Lisa says:

    the message is there..beautiful.

  4. Green Speck says:

    This was wonderful … lovely lines !!!

  5. It’s amiable but has a quiet scream behind it!

  6. danadampier says:

    I love that picture and I love the way you choose it to write your poem about. I wanted to use that picture, but my words just weren’t going in that direction. I love how you make that connection that fences can keep one out as well as in.

  7. Sabio Lantz says:

    I enjoyed the description of a pretense of an invite, of hidden meanness:
    “that gapped country smile” – great phrase.
    I am finding many of the poems about Sue’s stuff are dark and negative (mine too). Interesting.

  8. nephiriel says:

    “the message is there
    just more worn down by weather
    in falling-away paint chips”
    wonderful stanza, great work!

  9. Leo says:

    Enjoyed…whats the saying, good fences (strong fences?) make good neighbors…we all need our space, at least, for a little while. Just thought of photos I’ve seen of little kids peering through a picket fence. The opening lines are my favorite. Leo

  10. Mary says:

    I liked the mention that the message is still there, though worn down by weather….and I take it out of your poem and apply it to life!

  11. doncarroll says:

    uhhmm….yep I know all about the fences, sometimes barbed wire has come into play. nicely done susan. i’m finally out of my funk. sandy’s weather really bushwacked me for a bit.

    • Oh, love the comment, Don! Yes, finally drying up here too, but at least our houses did not wash away, so I have been refusing to say much about our weather… All the rain has been tedious, though.

  12. nelle says:

    Thought provoking. As one who sometimes like to turtle, secluded places have their uses. On the whole, I do like open spaces.

  13. kaykuala says:

    pushing us away
    from the steel
    that truly divides

    This is particularly the effect of a fence, it divides and imposed boundaries on us!
    Nicely Susan!

    Hank

  14. Chaty Lorens says:

    Went where I was gonna go—in between fences so to speak—and keeping things out. Very strong writing. (I have been contaminated and cannot write on this picture now.) “the message is there”, for sure. Thanks.

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