if i say i am sorry
for cutting me
out of your chest
without anesthesia
it does not matter
how cleanly i did it
or if it was sterile
& bloodlessly done
i killed something
& there is no gentle way
sometimes
to make room
for something bigger
but to lay it all open
***The prompt at Octpowrimo today is forgiveness, which is something I do not have the right to ask for here…
Susan Daniels Poetry 
Wow … this was raw power !!!
Thank you. The rawness of this particular thing had me awake until 5 this morning 😉
Nicely wrought, but can’t help feeling there should be more. As an aside I think sometimes you sell yourself (and the reader) short sometimes. You get a good solid start, or image and then you stop and all there is a solid image. If that is you intention I’ll retract my opinion-no I won’t-I still say there is more poetry to be made –step off the ledge, the worst that can happen is you spread your arms and glide to the ground–or crash, but sometimes you can make something better with parts->KB
Ah, you make some good points, and all are taken, but in this particular instance the poem is done. The surgery was a success but the patient is dead. Should I then bury the patient, too?
Do what you want. My comment was in general.
And it is appreciated–so thanking you for it.
The surgical metaphor really works but what I like most is your honesty.
This is my favorite part:
i killed something
& there is no gentle way
sometimes
to make room
for something bigger
but to lay it all open
Jeremy, thank you. Sometimes honesty is like surgery–no matter how gently it is done, how cleanly, something is opened and it hurts like hell.
Ooooh I like this one a lot! It’s just so plainly and yet gently, carefully laid out there. Very bittersweet.
Thanks, Holly!
I respect a conclusion. I don’t need it but there is respect.
Ouch!
Know what you mean, Trent..
Owie is right, Julie!
A lot of power in this one. It also stirs a different tangent, that of flattening the world around me in order to be real.
Oh, wow…that is profound, Nelle…
perfectly worded. for some it is not in their vocabulary.
thanks, Dom. I agree, it is missing in a lot of people.
Forgiveness. It is no easy thing to ask for, yet so crucial to consider–to nurture a heart that has strength enough to seek a path of personal truth, yet even stronger than this–to acknowledge the scars we leave behind in cutting this path. Whether you seek forgiveness here or not, dear Susan, you have the strength of heart to recognize the cost of your actions. And to seek amends as you may. I would call that integrity.
George–what you say here is so very powerful, and true. Thank you for these words.
You inspire me, constantly!
That, my friend, is mutual!
Splendid metaphor, Susan. And yes, a raw honesty.
Thanks, Celestine. Amazing how some things sting…