if i say i am sorry

if i say i am sorry
for cutting me
out of your chest
without anesthesia

it does not matter
how cleanly i did it
or if it was sterile
& bloodlessly done

i killed something
& there is no gentle way
sometimes
to make room

for something bigger
but to lay it all open

***The prompt at Octpowrimo today is forgiveness, which is something I do not have the right to ask for here…

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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24 Responses to if i say i am sorry

  1. Green Speck says:

    Wow … this was raw power !!!

  2. annotating60 says:

    Nicely wrought, but can’t help feeling there should be more. As an aside I think sometimes you sell yourself (and the reader) short sometimes. You get a good solid start, or image and then you stop and all there is a solid image. If that is you intention I’ll retract my opinion-no I won’t-I still say there is more poetry to be made –step off the ledge, the worst that can happen is you spread your arms and glide to the ground–or crash, but sometimes you can make something better with parts->KB

  3. Jeremy Nathan Marks says:

    The surgical metaphor really works but what I like most is your honesty.

    This is my favorite part:
    i killed something
    & there is no gentle way
    sometimes
    to make room

    for something bigger
    but to lay it all open

  4. Ooooh I like this one a lot! It’s just so plainly and yet gently, carefully laid out there. Very bittersweet.

  5. Trent Lewin says:

    I respect a conclusion. I don’t need it but there is respect.

  6. nelle says:

    A lot of power in this one. It also stirs a different tangent, that of flattening the world around me in order to be real.

  7. doncarroll says:

    perfectly worded. for some it is not in their vocabulary.

  8. George Ellington says:

    Forgiveness. It is no easy thing to ask for, yet so crucial to consider–to nurture a heart that has strength enough to seek a path of personal truth, yet even stronger than this–to acknowledge the scars we leave behind in cutting this path. Whether you seek forgiveness here or not, dear Susan, you have the strength of heart to recognize the cost of your actions. And to seek amends as you may. I would call that integrity.

  9. Mari says:

    You inspire me, constantly!

  10. Splendid metaphor, Susan. And yes, a raw honesty.

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