between the breath of god & created things

there is bareness
between the breath of God
& created things

inscrutable beginning of awe
folded into pulse/that core
belonging to us

but an us sparked,
summoned into being

& ultimately home

***Octpowrimo’s prompt for the day is the bare bones of poetry.  We were to take three words at random from a book (I got between, inscrutable, and belonging), write a poem, and then pare it to the essential.  This is the result.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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26 Responses to between the breath of god & created things

  1. boomiebol says:

    An excellent result

  2. jmgoyder says:

    You are so good at this – I am really jealous!

  3. Trent Lewin says:

    Amazing what bare bones can hold. Quite a trip Susan, and very very well done. Not sure I could take words like that and combine them this seamlessly.

    • Thanks, Trent. Despite my protestations to the contrary, I seem to be holding on to the residual effect of watching “The Fountain” again this week. Any credit/blame should go to Jeremy, as he made me watch it. He did.

      • Trent Lewin says:

        It’s a great flick. Aronofsky is a personal favorite. Just avoid Requiem for a Dream, unless you want nightmares for a couple of years. I do highly recommend Pi as well. Totally whacked movie about math and the name of God. Doesn’t really make sense. Not sure it has to though.

        • Yes, I love him…have stayed away from RFAD for that reason, and will watch Pi–have not seen it. Do I need to ingest psychedelics first to fully appreciate it, or will I feel like I have anyway?

          • Trent Lewin says:

            The latter. RFAD is a really really hard watch. But Jennifer Connelly and Jared Leto and the rest of the cast are amazing and the musical score is incredible. Even if you don’t see the movie, try to look up the music on You Tube, I’ve seldom seen music this good and this good a fit for a movie. Anyway, Pi is really interesting, low budget low frills black and white grimy little flick with huge aspirations, but the meaning is more one of interpretation and it more or less lurks in the background. Well worth the watch.

  4. nelle says:

    That conjures up one of my favourite songs… http://youtu.be/RtBOKqUuYc4

  5. Jeremy Nathan Marks says:

    A very arresting beginning. Barreness is a stony, ironclad word here which makes it, I think, exactly the right word to use.

  6. Green Speck says:

    You have concluded it beautifully … well done !!!

  7. George Ellington says:

    Bare bones of poetry? Oh my, the mechanics of all this! To think, how the simple beauty of God’s breath could evoke into being a creature of such intricate design and desire! Whatever the prompt may be, Susan, and whatever the guidelines prescribed, I simply enjoy the beauty of your inspired words.

    • Oh, thank you, George! Yes–technique and prompting aside, the important thing is the inspiration, gleaning words from our source and fusing them together–the difference between a collection of images and a poem rests inside that, I believe.

  8. simply brillant – one senses the breath of God on your fingers – stimulating your artistic creativity to extend His creation of man in Genesis!

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