(in)sanity

we live a
question, punctuated
by

madness curving into
an ease of marks, ideas of

reference

the .  that stops a murder

of

crows, so
they drop (stunned)

where hanging

flights of ideas flock &
fly south, in

loose associations
migrating &
leave me
reeling out lines of

winged heaviness to
catch nothing

***Enjambment is the challenge at Dverse today.  Come and twist lines with us!

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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55 Responses to (in)sanity

  1. Trent Lewin says:

    Ha! This just confirms the hugeness of your talent Susan. Well put. I am going to stick this one onto my desktop. Plus, you have provided an answer… I appreciate that.

  2. davidtrudel says:

    “madness curving into an ease of marks” is brilliant.

  3. BroadBlogs says:

    Wow. There are a lot of different ways of reading that.

  4. The Enfant Terrible says:

    EXCELLENT! I am so impressed. Your wordplay is magnificent in this piece. Well done!

  5. mimijk says:

    You awe me daily..sometimes multiple times a day! What gorgeous words lovingly constructed into a terrific piece..

  6. I suppose the (In)sane think we are all crazy and they are the only ones unaffected. I really enjoyed all of it but, love the use of the . to emphasise the line ..as if it could stop a murder of crows.
    Brilliant writing.

  7. Http://lkharris-Kolp.blogspot.com says:

    It really does change up the dynamics of the poem (enjambment). Enjoyed this!

  8. Very much creates the feeling of insanity, anxiety…the enjambment plays a huge role!

  9. brian miller says:

    nice…really cool line breaks in this…great opening line….we live a question….i like that much…the leave me jumps out as well later on….i like the period stopping the murder of crows….i might have moved that of to the next line to emphasize the murder and make it jump out more….

  10. Nice use of word break! thank you for sharing this

  11. nico says:

    Those last three stanzas, just perfect. It was a pleasure reading!

  12. Really enjoyed this, the form and love madness curving into marks, ideas of reference…it moved so well to a great conclusion.

  13. jmgoyder says:

    You are amazing!

  14. Very nice enjambment… I like the way you’ve used it to create that choppy feel in some places whilst running on in others.

  15. Enjambment often feels manipulative and strained. Here is seems like the only way to communicate your message. Natural and effective.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/10/18/her-the-steampunk-version/

  16. &
    leave me
    reeling out lines of

    winged heaviness to
    catch nothing…. really cool…and cool work on the enjambment as well

  17. Oh yeah. Love these:

    “fly south, in
    loose associations”

    “leave me
    reeling out lines of
    winged heaviness to
    catch nothing”

  18. Sabio Lantz says:

    I must say, I am not a fan of enjambment — especially with only a few words per line. I makes my eye too busy, the breaks disrupt the flow so I can’t even follow the poem. So I experimented regrouping your words — it helped me a little — though the loose association was still a bit vague for my weak poetry mind. But it helped:

    we live a question, punctuated by madness
    curving into an ease of marks,
    ideas of reference
    the . that stops a murder of crows,
    so they drop (stunned) where hanging

    flights of ideas flock & fly south,
    in loose associations
    migrating & leave me
    reeling out lines of

    winged heaviness to
    catch nothing

    Is that a different poem? Yeah, but at least I wanted to read it a few times. The first form was too painful for me — maybe just because my brain is older.

  19. Green Speck says:

    You indeed are Brilliance personified !!!

  20. This is wonderful ~ so evocative

  21. David King says:

    winged heaviness to
    catch nothing

    Magnificent ending. Puts the seal on a poem of distinction.

  22. sreeja says:

    cool..cool…and cool….ah yes so comes the lines…..loved this…

  23. nelle says:

    I like it just the way you created it.

  24. janehewey says:

    i am enjoying lingering inside of this philosophic poem. flights of ides, winged heaviness. and your line breaks are downright sublime!

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