rewind

Posted on October 4, 2012 by

life moves faster in rewind–
the extraneous
peeled off the essential things

but perhaps
it cannot erase

how your kisses tasted
like wild strawberries,
sweet with a little sting

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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27 Responses to rewind

  1. Beth Camp says:
    October 4, 2012 at 11:07 am

    I enjoyed reading this poem, romantic and edgy.That opening line is my favorite: “Life moves faster in rewind” — as if something sweet has been lost.

  2. Danielle Hall says:
    October 4, 2012 at 11:11 am

    sweet with a little sting – oh memories. 🙂

  3. George Ellington says:
    October 4, 2012 at 11:23 am

    So well concluded, Susan. Sweet with a little sting. You have a talent for this. Not only for expressing the personal bond to the external world, but also in bringing it all together in one very well-phrased line at the end. I’ve always liked that about your verses.

  4. davidtrudel says:
    October 4, 2012 at 12:42 pm

    You manage to be erudite and earthy together. It’s a wonderful balance that you achieve.

  5. Teresa O'Neill says:
    October 4, 2012 at 1:26 pm

    I can hear the screech of the tape moving back…..fast, yes the rewind.
    Love how you tied this to the strawberries

  6. Green Speck says:
    October 4, 2012 at 2:50 pm

    This is romantic yet sharp … lovely combo 🙂

  7. Lena Corazon says:
    October 4, 2012 at 6:06 pm

    Oh, that final stanza is just wonderful–really struck a chord within me. Lovely job, Susan!

  8. nelle says:
    October 4, 2012 at 9:59 pm

    Pondering the scenario…

  9. Bruce Ruston says:
    October 5, 2012 at 12:12 am

    Really linking those last lines of yours

  10. doncarroll says:
    October 5, 2012 at 6:16 am

    superb piece for all the right write reasons !!

  11. Shah Wharton says:
    October 6, 2012 at 5:40 am

    Loved this, the structure, the sounds, the sentiment. Well done. X

  12. readinpleasure says:
    October 15, 2012 at 2:03 pm

    Susan, you know I love it when you go so romantic. 🙂

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  14. 17rick47 says:
    October 24, 2012 at 6:32 am

    A link to this poem can now be found at ‘edge of frog’
    http://edgeoffrog.wordpress.com/

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