life moves faster in rewind–
the extraneous
peeled off the essential things
but perhaps
it cannot erase
how your kisses tasted
like wild strawberries,
sweet with a little sting
life moves faster in rewind–
the extraneous
peeled off the essential things
but perhaps
it cannot erase
how your kisses tasted
like wild strawberries,
sweet with a little sting
I enjoyed reading this poem, romantic and edgy.That opening line is my favorite: “Life moves faster in rewind” — as if something sweet has been lost.
Thank you, Beth–yes–what you just said there perfectly fists my mood today–romantic & edgy!
sweet with a little sting – oh memories. 🙂
Thank you, Danielle. Yes, those memories…
So well concluded, Susan. Sweet with a little sting. You have a talent for this. Not only for expressing the personal bond to the external world, but also in bringing it all together in one very well-phrased line at the end. I’ve always liked that about your verses.
Oh, thank you, George. Really appreciate the feedback.
You manage to be erudite and earthy together. It’s a wonderful balance that you achieve.
Thank you, David. That is what I aim for, actually. Do not know if you have seen this one: forgive me if you have. https://susandanielseden.wordpress.com/2012/07/25/an-earthy-spirituality/
I can hear the screech of the tape moving back…..fast, yes the rewind.
Love how you tied this to the strawberries
Thank you Teresa!
This is romantic yet sharp … lovely combo 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Oh, that final stanza is just wonderful–really struck a chord within me. Lovely job, Susan!
Thank you, Lena
Pondering the scenario…
🙂 just a quick, random thought
Really linking those last lines of yours
Thanks Bruce!
superb piece for all the right write reasons !!
Thanks, Don!
Loved this, the structure, the sounds, the sentiment. Well done. X
Thanks, Shah.
Susan, you know I love it when you go so romantic. 🙂
Thanks, C. Fiction is a wonderful thing 😉
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