rewind

Posted on October 4, 2012 by Susan L Daniels

life moves faster in rewind–
the extraneous
peeled off the essential things

but perhaps
it cannot erase

how your kisses tasted
like wild strawberries,
sweet with a little sting

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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27 Responses to rewind

  1. Beth Camp says:
    October 4, 2012 at 11:07 am

    I enjoyed reading this poem, romantic and edgy.That opening line is my favorite: “Life moves faster in rewind” — as if something sweet has been lost.

  2. Danielle Hall says:
    October 4, 2012 at 11:11 am

    sweet with a little sting – oh memories. 🙂

  3. George Ellington says:
    October 4, 2012 at 11:23 am

    So well concluded, Susan. Sweet with a little sting. You have a talent for this. Not only for expressing the personal bond to the external world, but also in bringing it all together in one very well-phrased line at the end. I’ve always liked that about your verses.

  4. davidtrudel says:
    October 4, 2012 at 12:42 pm

    You manage to be erudite and earthy together. It’s a wonderful balance that you achieve.

  5. Teresa O'Neill says:
    October 4, 2012 at 1:26 pm

    I can hear the screech of the tape moving back…..fast, yes the rewind.
    Love how you tied this to the strawberries

  6. Green Speck says:
    October 4, 2012 at 2:50 pm

    This is romantic yet sharp … lovely combo 🙂

  7. Lena Corazon says:
    October 4, 2012 at 6:06 pm

    Oh, that final stanza is just wonderful–really struck a chord within me. Lovely job, Susan!

  8. nelle says:
    October 4, 2012 at 9:59 pm

    Pondering the scenario…

  9. Bruce Ruston says:
    October 5, 2012 at 12:12 am

    Really linking those last lines of yours

  10. doncarroll says:
    October 5, 2012 at 6:16 am

    superb piece for all the right write reasons !!

  11. Shah Wharton says:
    October 6, 2012 at 5:40 am

    Loved this, the structure, the sounds, the sentiment. Well done. X

  12. readinpleasure says:
    October 15, 2012 at 2:03 pm

    Susan, you know I love it when you go so romantic. 🙂

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  14. 17rick47 says:
    October 24, 2012 at 6:32 am

    A link to this poem can now be found at ‘edge of frog’
    http://edgeoffrog.wordpress.com/

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