we live inside openness
& call it selves, world, trees
all driven by pulse
of blood or water
there is no distinction
between my bare feet and the earth
meeting & melding atoms
while i walk with her turns,
both of us
chained to matter

the sky and my body
know no difference in construct
into the atomic–
the sky spreads wider
but we are particulate

homeostasis: keeping it together
as we move through each other

that sky & i at times colliding

but gently

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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22 Responses to connectedness

  1. Sometimes not so gently … I really like this, the best poems make you open your eyes and look at the world differently, as with this one.

  2. fascinating poem. I like the way you blend elements of animist philosophy, biology and physics in this poem on connectedness! well done, Susan

    • Thanks, Noel. I keep getting drawn back into animism–which I sometimes erroneously refer to as phenomenology–in some of my poetry. Perhaps somewhere inside my mind there still lives a two-year-old that believes everything is alive; everything has feelings. No wait–let me make sure I rephrase that to say that that perception exists only in my poetry, before you call the gents with the butterfly nets…

      Glad you liked!

  3. Trent Lewin says:

    Seriously. What manic stuff gets into you to keep writing like this, all the time, is amazing. Particulates and homeostatis… but gently. It’s a joy reading your stuff Susan. Can’t say that about much.

    • Trent–I have no idea! I can tell you I am grateful for it. This was generated by a prompt of connectedness, so I am grateful for that too. Thank you so much; again, your comments are such a joy–so the joy is mutual…

  4. dreamsoftwilight says:

    Oh Susan, this is beautifully perfect. Thank-you for writing this.

  5. You are so good at describing nature. I love it.

  6. The Enfant Terrible says:

    I LOVE this. I love how you describe connectedness as being not only a perceived thing but also referring to science. Beautifully written and formatted. Quality.

    • Oh, gosh, Soraya–I am ashamed to say these were lines hastily scribbled this morning to address a “connectedness” prompt. I am ashamed of myself…I should tell you it took me hours–then I would deserve such praise. Thank you, though–you are so wonderful to me, my friend!

  7. nelle says:

    So hard to fathom. Reality humbles my imagination, as do your words.

  8. jyllianm says:

    your last two lines! Wonderful!

  9. ‘keeping it together, as we move through each other that sky & i at times colliding
    but gently.’ this has me catchign my breath. Well done, Susan.

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