if i could stretch my spirit
to where you are, i would haunt you
through the door we call dreaming
but it is difficult to spin a strand of self
that far, so instead i will call you here
sculpted of shadow where i want skin
sometimes distance is distance
& sometimes longing feels a little bit like loss.
perhaps we will dream an us together,
want drawn by want to a place where desire
is answered by touch, tangible
& real as the weight of your mouth moving over mine,
the heat of your breathing.
Susan Daniels Poetry 
‘sometimes longing feels a little bit like loss’ ~ what a beautiful line Susan
Polly–thanking you. I do feel that they are sides of the same feeling, and sometimes those lines blur between them.
Incredible poem
Oh, Julie–thank you.
Yes,
Dreams are doorways
To so many possibilities
Some touches are ephemeral, barely felt
But imbued with weight nonetheless
Longing conspires with desire
To add gravity to attraction
To settle
Stratified
Below
Beautiful! “Longing conspires with desire to add gravity to attraction” Now, that is poetry! Well written, David!
Oh, this is just lovely!
A little bit like loss? Oh, surely more than just a little. Still, this was beautifully written. And sensually ended. Quite lovely, Susan.
Thank you, George–glad it spoke to you. Okay, you are right–should probably read “an awful lot like loss,” but took some liberties with my longing to make it more alliterative.
Beautiful words Susan … perfectly written !!!
Thank you, GS. Glad you liked it!
Powerful, beautiful and sensual, all at once! all the lines are haunting, Inspired these clumsy lines below!
your song, Susan
floats softly like feather strokes
flashing like the dazzle of white teeth
on darkened Serre gums
how such tender caresss words still cut
like a sharp serrated knife,
piercing deep, stroking and stoking
is the paradox of a song
that blows, glows, warms and melts
all at once, four as once
Clumsy? Where is this clumsy? I think this is stunning. Wow right back to you!
“want drawn by want” – wow!
“I will call you here sculpted of shadow where I want skin” – wow wow!
“desire is answered by touch, tangible” wow wow wow
Just when you think you have read the best from her, another masterpiece emerges, As they say back home before winners such as this one, “carry go, Na you biko”!
Imela, my wonderful friend. I am humbled by such lavish phrase from my duet partner and author of that book of poems I keep being drawn back to read…
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Beautiful poetry by Susan. A must read! Prompted this clumsy reaction – your song, Susan
floats softly like feather strokes
flashing like the dazzle of white teeth
on darkened Serre gums
how such tender caresss words still cut
like a sharp serrated knife,
piercing deep, stroking and stoking
is the paradox of a song
that blows, glows, warms and melts
all at once, four as once
So many times you slice into life and put it to word, and it’s always a fun ride.
Nelle, thanks so very much!
They say you can’t lose what you never had, but to me, that’s the worst thing to lose. This is brilliant.
Oh goodness, Seb, I am floored! I am so glad it spoke to you. …and quite a bit humbled.
yummmmmy 🙂
Thanks, Jane 😉
I love, love every line of this poem. So magical and familiar
Oh my–thanks so much!
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This is beautiful in depth and surface!
beautifully sensual, Susan.loved it!!!
Thank you, Mohana.
So much goodness in this piece Susan!
I could just fall into:
“instead i will call you here
sculpted of shadow where i want skin
sometimes distance is distance
& sometimes longing feels a little bit like loss.
perhaps we will dream an us together,”
…and be happy for a long time!! Just lovely and brilliant!
Oh, Joseph–thanks so very much. Humbled.
ah…long distance relationships are not easy…the stretching of soul..i like…felt longing here susan..
Claudia–thanking you. Yes, the one plus side to it is longing makes for great poetry sometimes 😉
Such a beautiful and heart felt poem
Oh, thanks so much–glad you liked it.
Sometimes wanting what we can’t have is enough to drive us crazy too.
Beautiful poetry Susan.
Thanks much…hard to be driven where you already are, though 😉
Beautiful, Susan. I love the opening stanza.
Thanks, Laurie!
This is beautiful, Susan. I like the idea of two people dreaming each other….this feels very romantic….and real!
Mary, thank you! Sigh. Longing does make for strong words 😉
nice…your desire and longing are tangible in this…really nicely spun…and felt…if only we could stretch ourselves that far…love the initmacy of the closure as well…smiles.
oh, wow…thanks…blushes and shuffles feet.
I feel the longing…beautiful.
Oh, thank you, Ayala…
this is wonderful, you made me feel it, all of it. love love love that first stanza!
Kelly–thanks so very much!
Good God lady, you made me remember what that is then feel it too. Excellent poetry.
Gosh, Anna…thanking you. Glad you came along for the astral projection 😉
Very pretty poem. k .
Thank you, K!
Longing does feel like loss when it seems it can never be….beautiful work
Thanks, Susie–and yes, that is it, exactly 🙂
The desire in this is palpable Susan. Sensual, are we? Very beautifully expressed
Celestine, thank you. Just a little…hah–no, let’s be honest here–extremely sensual…thanks for liking it!
Incredible. wow…
Evelyn–thank you so much–also thanks for tweeting!
Amazing poem. That opening is soooo captivating: “i would haunt you
through the door we call dreaming”.
Stephen, thank you so very much. Humbled by your comment.
Longing and unrequited love? An emotional but warming poem…really liked the way ou moused the kisses with ‘weight’…just placed real emphasis and focus….strong write Susan
Stu, thanks so much. Glad you liked.
Love the door called dreaming. Distance and love are very difficult to reconcile and even more difficult to nourish. Beautiful work.
Beth–thank you–and thanks for the follow, too–you are wonderful! Can’t believe I have not followed you yet & just pick up your dverse work….have to change that right now.