Were but it so simple

only the first time
before we learn carefulness
do we give wildly of ourselves
& without reservation

after that lesson
love becomes more
of a trust exercise:

if you catch me
when I fall backwards,
then I will show you a map

through land mines
& razor wire
surrounding my heart,
either protecting
or restraining it

we must willfully teach each other
to forget

***Rhonda, this was inspired by your comment!  Forgive the roughness as I sand & plane it down through the day.

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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15 Responses to Were but it so simple

  1. Rhonda says:

    don’t sand and plane too much….I love it. it’s also akin to our fearlessness as children yes? we have no fear until someone teaches us that word. Ready, set, go……………:)

  2. doncarroll says:

    definitely like this. i know all about the defenses we set up it certainly has a little bite to it.

  3. such capacity for instant creativity – this ability to reach so easily within and come up with songs so beautiful and arresting! the world would be poorer had protector razor wires and restrainers allowed this voice to sing this song with metered reservations!
    Please do not plane this song – you risk making it plain, pale and flat should you do!

  4. in life, in living it and singing it, splashes of the wild and rough sneak past our custom checks and controls to invade and spice the logical and the finely tuned carefulness of our every day existence…..and in most times with colorful effects….your song here is but one good example!

  5. nelle says:

    The walls we build, and the exhilaration of connection when they come down. Love it.

  6. Jeremy Nathan Marks says:

    I really like the metaphors you are using here. The motion of both “falling back” and revealing a map of embattled terrain is very effective.

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