if i parse myself in pieces
they never add up to pretty
still, this skin
that burns and never tans
is the same that sings
under your hands
& my lips’ bare thinness
parts to let tongues twine
in a dancing kiss
my breasts
have fed 2 babies
with their heaviness
but still crest pleasure
where they meet your mouth
& these toes,
tapering from flat feet
& legs that need waxing
are too long to frame pedicures well
but still curl when i come
they know
i am the sum of this body
humming
a feeling we evoke
together
in spite of imperfection
measured
in parts
Susan Daniels Poetry 
Steamy Susan. Except that sounds like a super hero name:)
🙂 thanks, Bruce–it does…it’s a bird, it’s a plane….
Love this
Thank you, Eboni.
Love it! Thanks.
Thank you for the inspiration!
You are naughty! You didn’t lie 🙂
Like this a lot, although I’ve had to wash my brain – dirty thing 😉 Because it’s the whole point isn’t it – we are not ‘pictures’ but real bodies, and it’s what we mean for each other that creates passion – which hollywood et al ignores for the pretty vacancy.
Thanks, Mike. Yes, I strive to be naughty, but in the nicest of ways…Interestingly enough, I wrote this after being inspired by Georgia over at Broad Blogs, and then read your post, which meshes with this one too. As much as I wish my body was Hollywood perfect, I am just glad it all works together to make passion possible 😉
I’m just delighted to still be continent. My ambitions have shrivelled!
(you didn’t know I’d nicknamed my winkie ‘ambitions’ did you!)
You are making me laugh so violently I shall have to struggle to remain continent, myself!
Ah, picturing that makes me warm inside 🙂
(the laughing that is. Picturing you having a little accident doesn’t make me warm. Though it might make you warm momentarily – then damp, cold and ashamed. No no no!)
OK, OK, OK–I give up–you win! I am now laughing too hard to reply with anything remotely witty.
Susan this was a very well done poem. I like the passion very much.>KB
KB, thank you!
Susan, Gush, warm, steamy, naughty but nice. The message of your poem as I see it is
Complicit mind
over matter imperfect,
mind in matter,
matter under mind
matter with mind,
imperfect matter rolled up
kneaded soft hard by mind,
matter-mind
fused, matted and siamesed,
spiralling to fused mutual perfecting
and that is all that matters
for the whoops, the swooshes,
crests, waves,
the unending inebriating
deeps, dips
valleys and volleys
Oh! Yes, I would have to say you got the message, prof 😉
Lovely alliteration, but you seem to have made it hotter in this room than it already was and I now have to excuse myself and take a long, cold shower….
🙂 ACs work well too to bring down room temperatures!
Ah, they do–but it is WNY in November, and all my ACs are stored safely away until May…We usually have snow by Thanksgiving, but none of that outside right now.
I love the subtle hints in this piece 😉
Hee, hee. Not very subtle, was I? 😉
Very nice.
Thank you, Moriah
Very sensual. Realistic, mother earth (who has time to wax their legs anyway?) but still… yes, sensual. Love it.
Holly, thank you. No time to wax over here 😉
well well well…. love this Susan. Never wish for a Hollywood bod either.. real men want real woman. And you my dear, are REAL!
Ah, thank you Audra! You don’t think it is too unlike my usual stuff and will send people running away screaming, wishing they could bleach their eyes?
laughing.. oh come on now. You are asking me???
I love it and your readers will love it. You have to shake it up. You are one of the most versatile poets that I read. I like that you mix it up because then we all get to pick and choose. Not everyone will love everything but they will love something. If not? screw em! haaa just kidding. Seriously it is soo good. It is all natural and REAL. That is why I love it. It is YOU and it is ME
Thanks, Audra–for a little while tonight I wasn’t sure about this one, but I do like its real-ness 🙂
& thanks for saying that–you are mahvelous, madam…
I get it Susan. I have deleted a bunch of my posts because I thought I crossed a line(laughing and boy have I) but this is just plain old good woman.
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours. Hope you get your toes curled this weekend haaa haaa
Oh, I hope you put them back on, because while some of yours is suggestive, it is not out and out blatant…if anything I’d call it yummy. Speaking of yummy–hope you have a happy Thanksgiving & some nice toe-curling moments over the long weekend yourself!
Excellent and erotic. Wow – you have taken it to a new level with this one. I love this!
David, thank you! For once, I am beyond blushing, having read and answered all these comments 😀
Glad you enjoyed.
I came back to this a couple times, was quite different. I object to the use of the word “spartan” in anything. The rest is wicked good. I wanna see what happens when you strip out the supposed defects and go for the gold.
🙂 thanks, Trent. Can you give me another word that conveys a military mouth? Cos that’s what I have…glad you liked this–I think it is quite different from my usual.
Certainly caught my eye. I think it’s amazing when people write about themselves because I can’t much do that. I like frankness of others, even if I’m too inhibited to go that route. I think you write about yourself and your life very well, and there always seems to be some different element to your perceptions or thoughts, maybe the word cerebral fits in this context (I hate that word too). Spartan options… dunno. What the heck is a military mouth anyhow?
🙂 I changed it to bare, because I really didn’t care for spartan either. A military mouth is one with no excess, lean, and spare. minimalist. meaning: I have thin lips 😉
I like this. I went out with a woman who was ‘Hollywood perfect’ once, though god knows what she saw in me. She used to wear a t-shirt saying ‘Fragile. Do not crush.’
Hmmm–interesting label, that fragility.
This is what happens when I leave you unattended for a while.. you keep evolving to the next stage 🙂
Oh, gosh, Ken–thank you!
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