I am (2)

Posted on December 10, 2012 by Susan L Daniels

I am the voice of rain
on a tin roof
bringing dreams

I am both
flight & chase–
the running doe

& the arrow
shot & singing
through morning

the missed chance.
the flash in the stream.

catch me
if your hands can hold
light & water

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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14 Responses to I am (2)

  1. Noel Ihebuzor's avatar Noel Ihebuzor says:
    December 10, 2012 at 9:40 am

    The magic in the last stanza – it grips, the imagery….yes, we can touch water, yes, we can break the stream of light particles, but no, we cannot hold either of these.
    The second stanza haunts me – this image of the hunt – the prey and instrument of predation both in motion, but for different reasons….sad, but poignant.

  2. K. A. Bryce's avatar annotating60 says:
    December 10, 2012 at 10:44 am

    Susan your first and last stanza work together but the imagery in the middle does not connect them and seems unclearas to what is happening and why. You got good bones.>KB

  3. archcardinal's avatar archcardinal says:
    December 10, 2012 at 12:19 pm

    Now this is my fix!

    I am both
    flight & chase–
    the running doe

    I am the cause and effect
    the residue of and the substance… these lines define me more that ever. I can relate with this a zillion times. Just imagine how we are united by words… for we are both givers and takers… Sublime!

    • Susan L Daniels's avatar Susan L Daniels says:
      December 10, 2012 at 12:25 pm

      Obinna–here is one of the three or four Igbo words I know–Dalu 😉
      You so “got” this! We are givers and takers, yes; hunters and hunted, yes; the action and the reaction. So pleased you liked this!

  4. archcardinal's avatar archcardinal says:
    December 10, 2012 at 12:33 pm

    Did I mention that I love Northern Cree Singers? Meen their pow wow’s just rocks me silly. “Stay Red”, “War Cry” “Jingle Dress Dance” “Grand Entry” “Intertribal Dance” “The NDN” etc…. I have more than 100 of their songs (my eclectic taste for poetry spread into music too…)

  5. ruleofstupid's avatar ruleofstupid says:
    December 10, 2012 at 1:31 pm

    Lovely – you capture something essential that has nagged in my orbit at times.

    I run to you
    while I run from
    Rarely certain
    Which one

    Likewise I love the final stanza.

  7. Rhonda's avatar Rhonda says:
    December 11, 2012 at 7:35 pm

    Love it. Start to finish, including the middle. Rockin’

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