September Heights: Milky Way

Posted on September 5, 2012 by Susan L Daniels

our home galaxy–
just this one holds every star
I number tonight

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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41 Responses to September Heights: Milky Way

  1. Chèvrefeuille's avatar basho2012 says:
    September 5, 2012 at 12:23 pm

    Great one Susan, it.s so cool to write about our Galaxy. I contributed this prompt to HH, but I had some difficulties to write about our Milky Way.

  2. Susan's avatar Susan says:
    September 5, 2012 at 2:35 pm

    Nice take to point to the stars.

  3. unfetteredbs's avatar unfetteredbs says:
    September 5, 2012 at 2:40 pm

    galaxy stars… holding everything. beautiful capture in so few words

  4. Ramesh Sood's avatar Ramesh Sood says:
    September 5, 2012 at 2:43 pm

    Isn’t it so very beautiful..I love it…

  5. Green Speck's avatar Green Speck says:
    September 5, 2012 at 2:47 pm

    The last line was too good 🙂

  6. Kathy Donlan's avatar Kathy Donlan says:
    September 5, 2012 at 2:53 pm

    I love how you started with the immense vastness and ended with the simplicity of yourself counting stars. Well done!

  7. Patti's avatar Patti says:
    September 5, 2012 at 2:58 pm

    I like the last line a lot. It plays perfectly in contrast with the immensity of the galaxy.

  9. Ellecee's avatar Ellecee says:
    September 5, 2012 at 3:28 pm

    Very nice haiku, I like it a lot. The last line is my favourite too.

  10. Barbara's avatar Barbara says:
    September 5, 2012 at 4:22 pm

    I love how you pulled it together in the last line. Very original take!

  11. poetrydiary's avatar poetrydiary says:
    September 5, 2012 at 4:42 pm

    I like the way you personalise this – the last line makes the whole haiku work.

  12. Grace's avatar Grace says:
    September 5, 2012 at 6:47 pm

    I like that last line too ~ Lovely haiku ~

  13. Jolly's avatar Jolly says:
    September 5, 2012 at 7:45 pm

    Ho beloved is our home galaxy. Liked the belongingness 🙂

    Here’s one I wrote on the Milky Way bar after reading your comment 🙂

    teeth bite into bar
    morsels of tingling star bursts
    tastebud overdrive

    🙂

  14. doncarroll's avatar doncarroll says:
    September 5, 2012 at 8:59 pm

    nicel little contrast with this. it certainly is nice to count when you have a good idea how they got there. if you catch my angle on that.

  15. Locomente's avatar Locomente says:
    September 6, 2012 at 4:34 am

    I tried to say smthing abt the galaxy…
    Bt failed…
    Grt that u cud put words to ur thoughts…

    http://locomente.blogspot.in/2012/09/milky-way.html

  17. bruceruston's avatar Bruce Ruston says:
    September 6, 2012 at 8:32 am

    very nice – I know I am a little late been bevering away with new project and changes, AND broke some things on me blog

  19. Vinay Leo R.'s avatar Leo says:
    September 6, 2012 at 2:02 pm

    ah.. I’d count every one if I could 🙂 Thanks, Susan.

  20. becca givens's avatar becca givens says:
    September 6, 2012 at 6:21 pm

    Loved the direction … amazing how the placement of the lines sets it off. Nicely done!
    September Heights – Milky Way’s Breadth

  21. Magical Mystical Teacher's avatar Magical Mystical Teacher says:
    September 6, 2012 at 6:54 pm

    And what if you could number the stars beyond our galaxy?

    Milky Way

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