sex in the third person

Posted on July 2, 2012 by Susan L Daniels

if I and you
shifted to she and he
when we should be
just us

lost in the heat
of this we
fusing

there would be no
true union
just she
filtering feeling
through a camera lens

a voyeur
assessing performance
from across the room
***inspired by a post from BroadBlogs.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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13 Responses to sex in the third person

  1. Kyle's avatar Kyle says:
    July 2, 2012 at 2:44 pm

    i like seeing your naughty side susan

  2. BroadBlogs's avatar BroadBlogs says:
    July 2, 2012 at 5:06 pm

    I’m so glad BroadBlogs could be your muse for this poem. Wonderfully expressed!

  3. Noel Ihebuzor's avatar Noel Ihebuzor says:
    July 2, 2012 at 6:08 pm

    is this what is called the participant-observer approach? 🙂
    Naughty but nice!

  4. doncarroll's avatar doncarroll says:
    July 2, 2012 at 10:01 pm

    superb susan, it’s got a certain kind of rhythm that can get anybody moving along just a tad:)

  5. I HAVE A VOICE's avatar I HAVE A VOICE says:
    July 3, 2012 at 2:36 am

    Grammar can be quite a creative tool! I relish your sensitivities ~thanks Susan ~Deb

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  7. Patricia Chenayi Nyandoro's avatar Patricia Chenayi Nyandoro says:
    July 8, 2012 at 7:35 pm

    Hm , hm , hm, naughty side of Susan Daniels ??? Superb !

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