Can I write my love, formed in a sonnet
force my mouth to shape tone sweeter than this
magic I weave, a silver free verse net
I throw soft across air to catch a kiss
is this the path my fingers should begin
to paint you, shamelessly bright and joyous
weaving webs, yes, to tangle dreams within
neural webs and colors, to spread them thus
on canvas, or is it skin I streak flush
with shadings of passion, play enacted
in whispers, in language so warm, so lush
never shouted, with sighs punctuated
textures and colors of you surrounding
me in fingertip touches, lightening
***I can’t believe I wrote something traditionally formed–please be gentle 🙂 Interestingly, because I felt trapped in the form, I wrote about those lovely Native American dreamcatchers…
Susan Daniels Poetry 
i really love how you draw analogies susan – how you draw comparisons between colours and feelings – i am no good at this and must really have a go – thanks
Thank you Kyle–give it as try–its fun 🙂
If you can combine different kinds of wrappers, it is really not that much of a stretch from there, and you did that so very well 🙂
i’m trying but you seem to do it so seamlessly
Thank you so much, Kyle. Perhaps it is because I have always seen life in images rather than first perceptually, and write from that viewpoint. I.e., the way I see things gets translated onto paper when I write poetry rather quickly, so you get the raw data where senses/emotions overlap.
that’s pretty cool – it all goes thru a kinda intellectual level with me, i guess you are more of an artist than i am 🙂
No–not more of an artist–just a different process–I LOVE YOUR POETRY! So, thus, you must call yourself a poet….because that is what Ezra Pound defines a poet as….simply someone who writes poetry.
i’ll hang with ezra then
When traditional translates this well…embraceit. beautifully written words and image.
Thank you, SFAM. Might do another in 20 years 😀
Be gentle? Unnecessary. This is quite lovely, Susan!
George, thank you–I can’t tell you when the last time was I attempted to write a sonnet. Glad you liked it 🙂
Actually, I like it… and now I’ve got the Rolling Stone’s She’s A Rainbow in my head along with it.
Thank you, Nelle–I am glad I bring to mind good music for you 🙂
Ii’m cauught and happy in your weave!~Thanks dear~Deborah
Aw, thank you Deb! 🙂
Nice, really nice!
Thank you–I rather enjoyed this one!
Wow, you did so well with the sonnet. You wove this tale so well, and I especially love the two closing lines.
thank you, Sherry.
“Is this the path my fingers should begin
to paint you, shamelessly bright and joyous
weaving webs, yes, to tangle dreams within
neural webs and colors . . . ”
Yes! And the next part, and the next, until I am all WOW and loving your poem.
Susan–thanks so very much! Wrote this to see if I could squeeze into a form–so very glad you like it 🙂
I love sonnets, and writing them, but can’t always count to ten [iambs] 🙂
You can! And rhyme to, whilst making it feel free. Very clever stuff.
Oh my–thank you! I have written a total of 3 things in iambic pentameter 🙂
Have loads of respect for people who can write sonnets and the like more often than that! Thanks so much for your comments and support.
Very lovely sonnet Susan ~ I specially like the second stanza, a beautiful painting of words 🙂
Thank you 🙂
I loved this; and the form certainly worked with the subject!!
Thank you, Mary 🙂
this is beautiful….i love the allusions to painting as well…i think that and love and feeling go so well together….nice form as well…
Thanks, Brian!
This is beautifully written! Passionate and full of truth!
Oh, my. Thanks!
Susan, the traditional definitely worked for you! This flowed so beautifully and the images, my heart was humming 🙂
Thank you, Sara! Glad you liked it 🙂
I thought it was so beautiful! I am so happy your joined and and shared it with us~
Wonderful!
Thank you Ella! Nice to meet all of you!