pauses

el(lips)es
yours/mine
parenthetic
punctuated kiss
that trails and stretches want to

or maybe
after all !
that curve into each other almost
of spooning

((
))

into the . sleep

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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17 Responses to pauses

  1. davidtrudel says:

    You are so creative! Love it.

    • Thank you, David! This was a prompt to the wildly creative bunch I have stumbled over the past few weeks (and longer) on WP. I am hoping you will join us, eventually, when you have less irons in the fire.

  2. Trent Lewin says:

    I like this one, kind of quirky and off-beat. Amazing how inappropriate pauses and strange punctuation have a beauty to them all their own. You are now not only playing with language but with the marks that punctuate it. Have you ever met my friend J at http://ayaladn.com/? He writes very profoundly thoughtful poetry, and this reminds me of some of his stuff.

    • Wow, just checked him out briefly, and he is incredibly singular in his expression–in a very, very good way. Thanks for the link!

      Also glad you enjoyed this. I wanted to draw with punctuation marks.

  3. I love creative uses of punctuation. I just read a book by Tom Conrad called “The Semicolon Bitch Had to Die” – the punctuation was a key element in the entire book. Great job 🙂 Loved this.

  4. Oh, clever, Ms Daniels ~ I like.

  5. This is so cleverly done

  6. mobius faith says:

    Oh this is wonderful Susan!!!!

  7. nelle says:

    Nice exploration… fun!

  8. why do uncurable freudians persist in seeing things in simple shapes and innocent forms?

    Punctuations speak and sing.
    They hum breaks, pauses and stops.
    Shapes float and dance and whisper meanings….
    and in their shy whispers and gentle murmurs,
    spoons are no longer just for the table,
    even if they still collocate with meals and eating
    in these new fresh environments
    all descriptive and so so suggestive

    • Love this response! I had to play… Oh, wait, what do those ellipses MEAN now? And what about question marks? What messages am I sending, coded in punctuation–or am I just punctuating?

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