she sings of losing,
that blues queen who dusts her heart
with smoked sugar sad
Susan Daniels Poetry
Poetry from rural Western New York
she sings of losing,
that blues queen who dusts her heart
with smoked sugar sad
minimal yet effective – most engaging
Thank you, Polly.
This is beautiful..
Thanks so much, Deana.
smoked sugar? is this what I am thinking?
I don’t think so…I am a bit of a cook, and I was thinking smoked raw sugar would be a good image for something. If it suggests to you something else, then I would love to hear it.
Wild and lovely. “dusts her heart with smoked sugar sad”. This is a powerful image to me that comes through from the inside of my chest. Very much like a New Orleans jazz club singer I remember.
Alice, thank you so much!
This is beautiful …
Thank you GS.
Nice! I like the “sugar sad” line.
Thanks, Claudia!
blues queen and smoked sugar..ha….i love it
Thanks, Claudia!
That last line is just scrumptious!
Sugar Me a Haiku!
Thanks so much, MMT. Not I have to smoke sugar (would go good on something with salted caramel, I’m thinking…)
Emotively rich and brushed with sensual tensions! Lovely!
Thank you, Gemma.
What I hear is the rich, yet smoky sweet voices of the best blues singers! Love it!
WS, thank you. I was thinking Billie Holiday or Etta James
mmmmm, very vivid Susan, I can hear her sing.
Thanks, Cheryl.
uh huh. singing makes the sadness much easier to swallow You have captured the spoonful of sugar reaally well.
Thank you, Susan.
I’m hearing a Macy Gray sort of voice…
That works well here, Nelle.
Just gorgeous…so good!
Oh, thank you!
Beautifully written, Susan. ‘with smoked sugar sad’ Powerful line
Celestine, thanks!