immortality

when you taste sap
from such a tree
as this, rooted in myth

sap whiter than the milk
your mother made
& sweet

there will be no banishment–
it does not fruit that promise
the serpent tempted with

when you bleed
you will bleed flowers,
& though you will learn things
you will not die, you will live

you will live forever

mute and blooming

***inspired by The Fountain, the last scene of which I had to look up for Jeremy; another poem in film.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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47 Responses to immortality

  1. BroadBlogs says:

    Now that’s thought-provoking. I’m still puzzling over it.

  2. Lovely, Susan. Reading this reminded me of distant verses singing of Homeric heroes and divine promises. Although in such tones as this, I cannot help but feel that equally divine caprice cannot be far behind.

  3. jmgoyder says:

    Your poetry is so unique – I love it!

  4. I am fascinated by this poem which operates at three levels for me – biblical-spiritual, physical-sensual and mythological-epistemological, though the freudian me is drawn to the reading on the middle ground! can the mute bloom? and one who bleeds flowers, things of beauty, does he he/she suffer pain in the act of bleeding beauty? white sap, red blood, flowers, bllom and mute….still trying to get a handle on this beaitiful but troubling poem!

    • Ah, you are so perceptive, Noel. The poem was inspired by the last scene in an amazingly beautiful (but troubling) film! In the film, there is definitely suffering associated with the blooming, and the bleeding of flowers. If you have not seen “The Fountain, ” I highly recommend it.

  5. jomul7 says:

    Muteness and blooming are sometimes very loud and then again why need words when one is so busy blooming? Those two words hit me so hard, do keep on blooming :)

  6. I’m baffled and since I will not be able to watch the film, I can only appreciate this powerfully composed words.

  7. EXCELLENT! I bloody love this poem. This is one of my favorite pieces by you ALREADY. I love the floral imagery and the notion of immortality and the nature of it and of knowledge. Excellent! Consider it tweeted.

  8. ihatepoetry says:

    Exquisite and quietly triumphant!

  9. kelly says:

    Love this… so evocative. and these lines: “there will be no banishment–
    it does not fruit that promise”… wonderful!

  10. janehewey says:

    sap, milk, flower blood.. incredible.

  11. brian miller says:

    when you bleed
    you will bleed flowers,
    & though you will learn things
    you will not die, you will live…smiles…what a promise…there is some cool magic in your verse susan….

  12. Mary says:

    Some beautiful lines in this poem, Susan. There could be much worse than to bleed flowers! And to live forever as an extension of that……

  13. I like because it invited me back for several reads. Each time a new POV. I enjoyed much but can’t put my finger on it. I felt like I was a part of something special. I will read again. I do know something are not meant to be understood, but I so love the feel of these words you shared. Thank you.

    • Oh, Henry, thanks so much. Have you ever seen the movie “The Fountain?” The poem is kind of based on the last scene in the movie, which I did link above–it might aid in interpretation–or you can just enjoy the pictures it paints in your mind’s eye–up to you ;)

  14. sap whiter than the milk
    your mother made
    & sweet… the nod to the tree of life..bleeding flowers..the birthing something good from pain….beautiful susan..

  15. This is scriptures in poetry! You’re a dear soul of light! Deb

  16. lucychili says:

    these strange willful humans
    on dying are a gift to nature
    for a diaspora of new life
    i think that is a kind of grace

  17. Archna says:

    Susan, this is such a gorgeous tight piece filled with magic and beauty. My favorite, “when you bleed
    you will bleed flowers,
    & though you will learn things”, a reminder of continuous exploration and eternal existence. So glad I stopped in today. :)

  18. Beth Winter says:

    I am not familiar with the film but after reading the poem and comments, I am intrigued. Wonderful work.

  19. Susan says:

    My film! “The Fountain” is profound, born of the desire to find any way that would keep the love alive. And If I ever got a tattoo, it would be the tree of life on the back of the left shoulder.

    “there will be no banishment–
    it does not fruit that promise
    the serpent tempted with

    when you bleed
    you will bleed flowers . . .”

    Let me have that sap in my veins and in those of my loves so that, for however long it lasts, life is magnificent with story and flowers! Thank you so much for this poem!!!!!!

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