i do this

i don’t listen to mangione much any more
just in early fall or sometimes spring
since the night i met him & forgot your name
for a second time, difficult to hear over all that brass

just in early fall or sometimes spring
i need reminding i fell in love to him once,
for a second time, difficult to hear over all that brass
you said you liked women the color of blackberry jam

i need reminding i fell in love to him once,
I laughed & said i preferred men with blue eyes,
you said you liked women the color of blackberry jam
still there we were–no blackberries or blue eyes

I laughed & said i preferred men with blue eyes,
for a second time, difficult to hear over all that brass
still there we were–no blackberries or blue eyes
i don’t listen to mangione much any more

 

***I am really liking the lyricism and repetition in these pantoums.

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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25 Responses to i do this

  1. davidtrudel says:

    Love this, it is very jazzy how it works. I used to listen to Mangione, but he’s not on any of my playlists and is trapped in the vinyl collection.

  2. Trent Lewin says:

    I don’t know what a pantoum is, but this is awesome. Kind of like a song. Blackberry jam and blue eyes, just stuff that kind of makes me wonder.

  3. nelle says:

    What a ride, wow. Pitch, yaw, and roll. Well done.

  4. George Ellington says:

    Loved the construction on this one, Susan. You know, I tend to read verses aloud. Reading this one aloud had just the right effect.

  5. This is an effective pantoum Susan ~ I really like the repetition and the challenge of this poetry form ~ it especially lends itself to a musical theme, I think ~ well done.

  6. Rhonda says:

    Yay, the pontoon is back! Loved this one, tickled me. :)

  7. This has a riff-like quality about it or a “head piece/theme” from a jazz tune. I like that about it.

  8. Seb says:

    A rich and tasty brew.

  9. I remember him well and how suave he played…he took me away~ Wonderful memory.

    • Oh–he was great. he walked into the club (he was not very tall) and asked me why I was watching the door. i said I was waiting for friends. He said–oh, I thought you were here to see me. i said, well, not see–but I am here to listen ;)

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