intangible

if i could stretch my spirit
to where you are, i would haunt you
through the door we call dreaming

but it is difficult to spin a strand of self
that far, so instead i will call you here
sculpted of shadow where i want skin

sometimes distance is distance
& sometimes longing feels a little bit like loss.
perhaps we will dream an us together,
want drawn by want to a place where desire
is answered by touch, tangible
& real as the weight of your mouth moving over mine,
the heat of your breathing.

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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61 Responses to intangible

  1. ‘sometimes longing feels a little bit like loss’ ~ what a beautiful line Susan

  2. davidtrudel says:

    Yes,
    Dreams are doorways
    To so many possibilities
    Some touches are ephemeral, barely felt
    But imbued with weight nonetheless
    Longing conspires with desire
    To add gravity to attraction
    To settle
    Stratified
    Below

  3. George Ellington says:

    A little bit like loss? Oh, surely more than just a little. Still, this was beautifully written. And sensually ended. Quite lovely, Susan.

    • Thank you, George–glad it spoke to you. Okay, you are right–should probably read “an awful lot like loss,” but took some liberties with my longing to make it more alliterative.

  4. Green Speck says:

    Beautiful words Susan … perfectly written !!!

  5. Powerful, beautiful and sensual, all at once! all the lines are haunting, Inspired these clumsy lines below!

    your song, Susan
    floats softly like feather strokes
    flashing like the dazzle of white teeth
    on darkened Serre gums
    how such tender caresss words still cut
    like a sharp serrated knife,
    piercing deep, stroking and stoking
    is the paradox of a song
    that blows, glows, warms and melts
    all at once, four as once

  6. “want drawn by want” – wow!
    “I will call you here sculpted of shadow where I want skin” – wow wow!
    “desire is answered by touch, tangible” wow wow wow
    Just when you think you have read the best from her, another masterpiece emerges, As they say back home before winners such as this one, “carry go, Na you biko”!

  7. Reblogged this on visionvoiceandviews and commented:

    Beautiful poetry by Susan. A must read! Prompted this clumsy reaction – your song, Susan
    floats softly like feather strokes
    flashing like the dazzle of white teeth
    on darkened Serre gums
    how such tender caresss words still cut
    like a sharp serrated knife,
    piercing deep, stroking and stoking
    is the paradox of a song
    that blows, glows, warms and melts
    all at once, four as once

  8. nelle says:

    So many times you slice into life and put it to word, and it’s always a fun ride.

  9. Seb says:

    They say you can’t lose what you never had, but to me, that’s the worst thing to lose. This is brilliant.

  10. jomul7 says:

    I love, love every line of this poem. So magical and familiar

  11. jomul7 says:

    Reblogged this on jomul7 and commented:
    This is beautiful in depth and surface!

  12. Mohana says:

    beautifully sensual, Susan.loved it!!!

  13. Joseph Hesch says:

    So much goodness in this piece Susan!

    I could just fall into:

    “instead i will call you here
    sculpted of shadow where i want skin

    sometimes distance is distance
    & sometimes longing feels a little bit like loss.
    perhaps we will dream an us together,”

    …and be happy for a long time!! Just lovely and brilliant!

  14. claudia says:

    ah…long distance relationships are not easy…the stretching of soul..i like…felt longing here susan..

  15. Kim or Lisa says:

    Such a beautiful and heart felt poem

  16. Sometimes wanting what we can’t have is enough to drive us crazy too.
    Beautiful poetry Susan.

  17. Laurie Kolp says:

    Beautiful, Susan. I love the opening stanza.

  18. Mary says:

    This is beautiful, Susan. I like the idea of two people dreaming each other….this feels very romantic….and real!

  19. brian miller says:

    nice…your desire and longing are tangible in this…really nicely spun…and felt…if only we could stretch ourselves that far…love the initmacy of the closure as well…smiles.

  20. ayala says:

    I feel the longing…beautiful.

  21. kelly says:

    this is wonderful, you made me feel it, all of it. love love love that first stanza!

  22. Good God lady, you made me remember what that is then feel it too. Excellent poetry.

  23. ManicDdaily says:

    Very pretty poem. k .

  24. Longing does feel like loss when it seems it can never be….beautiful work

  25. The desire in this is palpable Susan. Sensual, are we? Very beautifully expressed

  26. Evelyn says:

    Incredible. wow…

  27. Uneven Stephen says:

    Amazing poem. That opening is soooo captivating: “i would haunt you
    through the door we call dreaming”.

  28. poemsofhateandhope says:

    Longing and unrequited love? An emotional but warming poem…really liked the way ou moused the kisses with ‘weight’…just placed real emphasis and focus….strong write Susan

  29. Beth Winter says:

    Love the door called dreaming. Distance and love are very difficult to reconcile and even more difficult to nourish. Beautiful work.

    • Beth–thank you–and thanks for the follow, too–you are wonderful! Can’t believe I have not followed you yet & just pick up your dverse work….have to change that right now.

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