stripping

we only notice
what lies beneath soil
when we take off layers–
less like peeling an onion
& more like skinning an animal
caught in a trap for hide or meat,
flesh still shuddering & warm,
ready for butchering

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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28 Responses to stripping

  1. George Ellington says:

    Beautifully said, Susan. You have a gift, I think, for acknowledging things too often neglected and for voicing your observations in a most compelling way.

  2. Bruce Ruston says:

    The first stanza is great and my favorite part

  3. Trent Lewin says:

    You should write a book of poetry Susan. I would buy it in a heartbeat and visit it often.

  4. I LOVE this.. This is one of my favorite pieces from you. It’s raw, honest… I feel naked after having read it. Wonderful.

  5. Green Speck says:

    Too intense … but as always, beautifully crafted !!! How can you write such brilliant poetry all the time?

  6. Seb says:

    It’s like the old songs says – it ain’t no sin to take off your skin and dance around in your bones.

  7. nelle says:

    True enough, with people, with personalities, with what lies all around us, there to share, but we don’t content with a little of this and a little of that, do we?

  8. You have a wicked writer’s mind that will stop at nothing :-)

  9. jomul7 says:

    peeling an onion is less painful to the eyes but skinning an animal is (at least for me) heartbreaking. If that was my lifestyle, I would say a prayer before doing it. hmmmm, I sense a poem coming, I should go write!

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