sometimes sun
blooms dark spots, cooling
his burning
by degrees
tempering infinite chained
burning for moments
do we cool,
lover, in this way?
our first heat
damping back
shifting to the controlled burn
of a lasting flame?
23 thoughts on “the dark spots on the sun”
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Really nice write!
Thank you–I really like the tentativeness of this form–it seems to beg the one writing it to ask questions.
We stew our loves
Raising the heat to a boil
Later, reduced to a low simmer
Slow cooker
But the aroma
Is appetizing
from suns to slow cooking–like the shift very much! You are definitely raising the bar on any poetic responses I can brew (or stew) up
Love it Susan…and having been away I now find here what looks like to me beautiful growth– writing, just trying out new style or personal maybe– but whatever it is I appreciate the change I read…so cool…love your writing Susan!
-Jennifer
Oh, Jennifer–thank you–and you have been missed!
‘the controlled burn of a lasting flame’ – I love your writing..
Oh, Mimi–thank you. You are so kind!
Beautifully written
GS, thank you. You really should try this form–it is like a haiku, sort of, but expanded a bit. Fun!
lasting burn indeed… very hot
oh, thank you!
That’s a good analogy – even if a sunspot is still about 4000 degrees!
Yes–which is still pretty damned hot
Nice strong write and images in processes
Thank you, Bruce!
temperature changes and evolutions!
Choices…
Yes
a magnifying glass!
wow! Me love this very much!
Celestine–thank you!